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My Sister, My Best Friend One of my best friends is hands down my big sister. Unlike many brothers and sisters out there, who like to fight with each other all the time, my sister and I are very united. For example, we hardly ever have disagreements with one another. Of course, like many children, when we were kids we would always pick a fight with each other. However, we no longer do that these days; on the contrary, we are very close. Moreover, we have each other's back, and she's always there for me as well as I am there for her. Furthermore, she's not only very good at giving me advices, but she's also very supportive. I'm the kind of girl who likes to stay out of trouble, but if I ever be in trouble I know I can count on her to give me great advices. Also, she's very supportive with me as I am with her; she always encourages me to chase my dreams no matter what. Additionally, her taste in a lot of things is pretty similar to mine. We like going to the same places, listening to the same kind of music, reading the same kinds of books and we are both crazy about TV shows! Besides all that, we have the same way of thinking, I'd say. It's nice talking to her, we usually have good conversations and I always learn things while chatting with her. I'm proud to say that my sister is one of my best friends, I really look up to her.

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My Sister, My Best Friend

One of my best friends is hands down my big sister. Unlike many brothers and sisters out there, who like to fight with each other all the time, my sister and I are very united. For example, we hardly ever have disagreements with one another. Of course, like many children, when we were kids we would always pick a fight with each other. However, we no longer do that these days; on the contrary, we are very close. Moreover, we have each other's back, and she's always there for me as well as I am there for her.

Furthermore, she's not only very good at giving me advices, but she's also very supportive. I'm the kind of girl who likes to stay out of trouble, but if I ever be am in trouble, I know I can count on her to give me great advices. Also, she's very supportive with me, as I am with her; she always encourages me to chase my dreams no matter what.

Additionally, her taste in a lot of things is pretty similar to mine. We like going to the same places, listening to the same kinds of music, reading the same kinds of books and we are both crazy about TV shows! Besides all that, we have the same way of thinking, I'd say. It's nice talking to her, because we usually have good conversations and I always learn things while chatting with her. I'm proud to say that my sister is one of my best friends,. I really look up to her.

Overall, great writing!

"always pick a fight" isn't wrong, but seems more natural as "always pick fights" or "often start fights"

Advice is rarely plural, even when referring to more than one. Indicate plurality by adding a quantifier, "types/kinds of advice" 

"I ever am" is also ok, but it is ver common for people to say, "I'm ever"

The other things are really small, but feel free to ask if you have a question.

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