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STORIES WANTED As soon as he heard the noise. Tim ran outside to see what was happening. When he was outside he didn't notice anything, the atmosphere was quiet. Tim was puzzled. Immediately he decided to sweep the area. He went in the backyard and he found out that someone had been there since there was a red blindfold. He checked it and it was really similar to that one his favourite singer wears during his concerts. Furthermore, 30 metres far from him there was something shining. It was a CD. Tim was confused. He went inside the house with his blindfold and CD and after that he put the CD in the computer to read it. In the Cd there was only his favourite song and a document in which there was written to go out, again. Tim followed the instructions really excited. As soon as he was outside he saw a big crowd and lots of TV cameras who were filming Tim's reaction. Suddenly his favourite singer turned up and Tim weeped for joy. It was such a big surprise for him. He was speechless. His mother winked at him then she whispered at him: 'You deserve it'

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As soon as he heard the noise, Tim ran outside to see what was happening. When he was outside he didn't notice anything, the atmosphere was quiet. Tim was puzzled. Immediately he decided to sweep the area. He went in into the backyard and he found out that someone had been there since there was a red blindfold. He checked it and it was really (usually very) similar to that one the one that his favourite singer wears during his concerts. Furthermore, 30 metres far further from him there was something shining. It was a CD.
Tim was confused. He went inside the house with his blindfold and CD and after that he put the CD in the computer to read listen to it.
In On the Cd there was only his favourite song and a document in which there was written (an instruction) to go out, again.
Tim followed the instructions really excitedly. As soon as he was outside he saw a big crowd and lots of TV cameras who were filming Tim's reaction. Suddenly his favourite singer turned up and Tim weeped for joy. It was such a big surprise for him. He was speechless. His mother winked at him then she whispered at him: 'You deserve it'

An interesting, well written tale Nadia. Keep it up!



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nice :)

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