Please I need somebody review my writing, it's an example of exam B1 Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to complain about the present situation that affect our neighbourhood actually. Few weeks ago I

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Please I need somebody review my writing, it's an example of exam B1 Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to complain about the present situation that affect our neighbourhood actually. Few weeks ago I could show, when I walked with my family that the most of rubbish bins were empty because people left their plastic bag next to it and did't into, it was embarrasing! And there is a unpleasant smell around them, besides the most of plastic bags were break down and all rubbish out of it, so the road was very dirty too. I think is very important a good education about recycling because in some parks I could see youngers who went out and left beer or coke cans, candy wrappers and other things throw away on the ground, it was filthy! It's very important to teach the use of 4R: Recycle, reuse, reduce and repair from their childhood, and that they can use it in they dairy life , so when they will be adults it will be some regular for they. Finally, in my opinion we should teach the high clean-up cost to people who don't recycle and maybe they must pay it, so probably they will be mor consistent with their actions. It would be grateful if you would make something about that I'm looking forward to hearing from you

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Please I need somebody review my writing, it's an example of exam B1

This is really good. I have probably been stricter than usual in my marking because you said you are practising for an exam, so I thought it was best to look at every little detail.

Yellow = correcting a mistake, blue = suggesting an improvement

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to complain about the present situation that affects our neighbourhood currently.
A few weeks ago I could show ("see" would be better here, I think), when I walked with my family that the* most of the rubbish bins were empty because people had left their plastic bags next to them and didn't into instead of inside. It was embarrassing, and** there is an unpleasant smell around them, and besides (or "also") the most of* the plastic bags were breaking down*** and all the rubbish was falling out of them, so the road was very dirty too.
I think is very important a good education about recycling is very important because in some parks I could see youngsters who went out and left beer or coke cans, candy wrappers and other things thrown away on the ground. It was filthy!
It's very important to teach the use of the 4Rs: Recycle, reuse, reduce and repair from their childhood, so that they can use it in they daily life , so when they will be (or "when they are") adults it will be a regular habit for them.****
Finally, in my opinion we should teach the high clean-up cost to people who don't recycle (or "...we should teach people who don't recycle about the high cost of cleaning up their waste..") and maybe they must (or "should have to") pay it, so probably they will be more consistent with their actions.
I would be grateful if you would do something about that. (or "I would be grateful if you could implement some of these ideas")
I'm looking forward to hearing from you

I couldn't fit everything in so here are the footnotes from that last correction!

*="most sometimes needs "the" but not in all situations. If it has "of" after it, you don't need "the" as well.So to take a few examples...

- Most of the Americans we met were Trump supporters

- The rest said Trump was the most awful man they had ever seen

- They said Bernie Sanders was the candidate they trusted the most

- But now he was out of the race, Hillary is ahead in most of the polls, thank god!

Of course there are sentences that have neither "the" nor "of" but I can't think of any where you would write "the most of"

**=These sentences could be grouped better. "It was embarrassing" seems like the start of a new thought, and we don't usually start sentences with "and" unless it's to make a particular literary effect. At B1 level, I think the punctuation I have suggested is probably safer but I'm sorry if I have misunderstood your intentions.

***=I think a better phrase here would be "were falling apart" or "had been ripped open". "breaking down" usually implies either (a) a machine is no longer working correctly or (b) something has started to rot under the influence of chemicals or bacteria. I think you are just talking about bags being ripped apart by foxes or just damaged by being dropped or piled up...?

****=A more idiomatic way of saying this would be "they will be used to it"

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