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Does television have a positive influence on the society ? Television has a positive influence on the society because it provides a perfect excuse for socializing. For instance, every day, students at schools and people at work engage in conversation about their favorite TV programs. Moreover, when you want to get in with people who you do not know, like people traveling​ with you, popular TV programs may come in useful. Also, it is able to give us a new lease on life. For instance, I am often at my worst last thing at night, so it remains a fertile ground for wasting time. But watching comedies, television shows or movies is enough to take me out of myself.

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Does television have a positive influence on the society ?

Television has a positive influence on the society because: 

Television provides a perfect excuse for socializing.  For instance, every day, students and people at work engage in conversations about their favorite TV programs.  When you want to get to know people who you do not (like people traveling​ with you), popular TV programs may come in useful.

Also, television is able to give some a new lease on life.  For instance, I am often at my worst at night, so it remains a fertile ground for wasting time.  Watching comedies, television shows or movies is enough to keep me from withdrawing into myself.


(Added two spaces every periods, reworded things a bit so they flow, mention television at the beginning of a paragraph so the topic is set, removed a couple terms like moreover so it flows a bit better when read)

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Does television have a positive influence on the society ?

Television has a positive influence on the society because


it provides a perfect excuse for socializing. For instance, every day, students at schools and people at work engage in conversation about their favorite TV programs. Moreover, when you want to get in with people who you do not know, such as people who you are traveling with, popular TV programs may come in useful.
Also, it is able to give us a new lease on life. For instance, I am often at my worst late at night, so it remains a fertile ground for wasting time. But watching comedies, television shows or movies is enough to take me out of myself.
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Does television have a positive influence on the society ?

Television has a positive influence on the society because, it provides a perfect excuse for socializing. For instance, students at schools and people at work can engage in conversation about their favorite TV programs. Moreover, when you want to get to know people whom you do not know, like people traveling​ with you, a popular TV programs may become  useful. Also, TV is able to give us a new lease on life. For instance, I am often at my worst late at night, so it remains a fertile ground for wasting time. Watching comedies, television shows, or movies is enough to take me out of myself.


- You can use one or the other (For instance, every day, ) it doesn't sound good using both. 


Hope this helps

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Does television have a positive influence on the society ?

Television has a positive influence on the society because it provides a perfect excuse for socializing. For instance, every day, students at schools and people at work engage in conversation about their favorite TV programs. Moreover, when you want to get in with get to know people who you do not know, like people traveling​ with you, popular TV programs may come in useful handy.
Also, it is able to give us a new lease on life. For instance, I am often at my worst last thing at night, so it remains a fertile ground for wasting time (TV wastes time? TV makes you sad? What are you trying to say with this and how does it relate to the rest of the paragraph?). But watching comedies, television shows or movies is enough to take me out of myself (try using a different phrase that means 'distract me' or 'makes me feel happy again'.)

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