안녕하세요! 소싀애요. 한국말 못해요 ㅋㅋㅋ 그러나 읽고 쓸 수 있어요.

First and foremost, great job! There are just a few simple things that I would correct, not because they are "wrong" necessarily, but because certain words in English make more sense (in context) than others. I have corrected by sentence for it to sound more colloquial. You'll find my corrections in red. If you'd like a long list of the reasons why you would and would not say certain things, send me a message.

News article that I read before about child abuse in a daycare center.

1. I read an article about abusing young child child abuse in daycare centers in on a Korean website.
2. In the article, a daycare center teacher was arrested for assaulting a young child.
3. In a CCTV footage from the center, the teacher hits the young child and knocks her over/down.
4. There are were several children in front of the teacher, and they looked afraid of her.
5. Child abuse in a daycare centers has become a big issue in Korea.
6. Therefore Because of this, setting up a CCTV systems in a daycare centers became mandatory recently, but even though there is are a CCTV systems in place, child abusing abuse is still happened happening. 

Overall, great job! Keep it up. And like I said above, if you have specific questions, feel free to send me a message because it will only allow me to write a certain number of characters here!

-Josh

News article that I read before about child abuse in a daycare center.

I read an article about *the*  abusing abuse *of a* young child in a day care center in on a Korean website. In the article, a daycare center teacher was arrested for assaulting a young child. In a CCTV footage from the center, the teacher hits the young child and knocks her. *down* There are several children in front of the teacher, and they look afraid of her. Child abuse in a daycare center has become a big issue in Korea. Therefore, setting up a CCTV in a daycare center became mandatory recently, but even though there is a CCTV, child abusing abuse is still happened.  happening.

I am willing to have your feedback. :)

News article that I read before about child abuse in a daycare center.

I read an article about abusing young child in a day care center on a Korean website. In the article, a daycare center teacher was arrested for assaulting (Well personally I think the word 'assaulting' is too aggresive in this scenario, and the word 'abusing' or 'mistreating' can be used instead) a young child. In a CCTV footage from the center, the teacher hit (simple past tense) the young child and knocked her down. There were several children in front of the teacher, and they seemed to be afraid of her. Child abuse in a daycare center has become a huge/top issue in Korea. Therefore, setting up a CCTV in a daycare center has become mandatory recently, but even though there is a CCTV, child abuse is still happening.

Mistakes in grammar can be avoided by caution, if you keep that in mind and check every sentence upon finishing. Over time, you will be able to write correct sentences naturally.