My volunteer experience in a senior care center.
I started to help elderly people in a senior care center because I wanted to have volunteer experience in a health care field in Canada since I was a nurse in my country. I have volunteered since 3 weeks ago, and I do it every Tuesday morning. My major role is encouraging and bringing residents to join a recreational program or assist seniors. They have dementia or Alzheimer's disease, so most of them hesitate to interact with others, so they need a someone who can encourage their social activity.
In the senior care center, I met really nice elderly people and I really enjoy to spend time with them. Since I have started volunteer a few weeks ago, some seniors can remember me and they seem to happy to spend time with me, so I feel rewarding.
Could you correct my sentences sounds natural? Thank you so much!
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My volunteer experience in a senior care center.
I started to help elderly people in a senior care center, because I wanted to have volunteer experience in the health care field in Canada since I was a nurse in my country (Remember to pause appropriately when you have a long sentence). I have volunteered since 3 weeks ago, and I do it on every Tuesday morning. My major role is encouraging and bringing residents to join a recreational program or assisting seniors. They either have dementia or Alzheimer's disease, so most of them hesitate to interact with others. They need a someone (you either use someone or a person) who can encourage their social activity (Actually, this sentence will be better expressed using passive voice).In the senior care center, I met really nice elderly people and I really enjoyed to spend time with them. Since I have started volunteering (it's a verb. start doing something. if it's a noun, it refers to the person who volunteers) a few weeks ago, some seniors can still remember me and they seem to be happy to spend time with me, so I feel rewarding.
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Well I think your vocabulary and grammar are quite impressive and you made few mistakes. Genernally, the whole passage is coherent and reads smoothly. The only thing worth paying attention to is that you need to pause when expressing, and limit the use of the word 'so'. Sometimes you can replace it with other words or phrases like 'thus' or 'as a result',etc, or split it up into two sentences.
Good luck with your study and have a nice day.
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