An informal E-mail

From: David
To: Dani
Subject: Your trips

Hi Dani, thanks you for you email. I like to know your news yours. It Is very good news that you are coming come to our house on holidays, It will be fun. Every The family are very happy, Your father, granfather, mother, you sister, and brother..

We want pick you up in at the airport for then we to go to house and for you to greet to everybody. Then we are going to go with my friends to drink something. You will spend well. (or good?) have a great time. On saturday, every we will all go to the beach and sailing with in our sail boat.

Now, I am going to rent a car for so that we can to travel every the throughout the week and can to see every all the islands. You will love it.

You tell Tell me when you arrive for so I can pick you up and to go get to the house sooner.

Regards

Great job! The maining of this e-mail is clear all the way through. When the second part of a sentence explains the reason for an action in the first part of the sentence we usually use 'so' instead of 'for'. Keep up the good work!

A informal Email

From: David
To: Dani
Subject: Your trips

Hi Dani, thank you for your email. I like to know your news. It Is very good news that you will come to the house for the holidays.  It will be fun. The whole family is very happy; You, dad,  grandpa, mom, your sister and your brother..

We want to pick you up at the airport and then we will go to the house and you can greet everybody. Then we are going to go with my friends for drinks. You will enjoy yourself. (or good?). On saturday, everyone will go to the beach and go sailing with our sail boat.

Now, I am going to rent a car so that we can travel every day of  the week and can  see all the islands. You will love it.

 tell me when you arrive so I can pick you up and get (arrive, llegar- a vezes usamos get (conseguir)para significar llegar) to the house sooner.

Regards

Que bueno, Digame, si tendrías  preguntas.