Please help me with my mistakes I am writing to apply for the position of TTTTTT as advertised in Staff Recruitment. I am enclosing my CV, as requested. I am currently living in England and working a

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Please help me with my mistakes I am writing to apply for the position of TTTTTT as advertised in Staff Recruitment. I am enclosing my CV, as requested. I am currently living in England and working as a volunteer in PDSA, Retail Shop I completed my studies of Management at University of XXXX , France. During my internships in Paris and Strasbourg I developed organisational skills, the ability to cooperate within international teams, and to work independently. During my studies , I supported the International Student Welcome at XXXX Club in addition I had the opportunity to successfully lead a team and organised events within music festivals for international public in France and Poland. I am dynamic and rigorous. I like learning languages, I am fluent in French and Spanish, I enjoy experiencing different cultures and building relationships. I wish to use my skills in YYYY University. In addition to my academic qualifications and prior experience in the industry, I also believe that my resume exhibits strong potential for development. For these reasons I feel that I would be an asset to YYYY University.

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Please help me with my mistakes

I am writing to apply for the position of TTTTTT as advertised in Staff Recruitment. I am enclosing my CV, as requested.

I am currently living in England and working as a volunteer in PDSA, Retail Shop

I completed my studies of Management at University of XXXX, France. During my internships in Paris and Strasbourg I developed organisational skills, the ability to cooperate within international teams, and to work independently.

During my studies , I supported the International Student Welcome at XXXX Club in addition I had the opportunity to successfully lead a team and organised events within music festivals for international public in France and Poland.

I am dynamic and rigorous. I like learning languages, I am fluent in French and Spanish, I enjoy experiencing different cultures and building relationships. I wish to use my skills in YYYY University.

In addition to my academic qualifications and prior experience in the industry, I also believe that my resume exhibits strong potential for development. For these reasons I feel that I would be an asset to YYYY University.

Hi Daniela. What you've written is almost perfect. There are only some minor changes needed which are highlighted in yellow below.

Please help me with my mistakes

I am writing to apply for the position of TTTTTT as advertised in Staff Recruitment. I am enclosing my CV, as requested.

I am currently living in England and working as a volunteer in PDSA, Retail Shop
[You need to write the name of this charity in full as you can't assume everyone knows what it means. So the rewrite would look something like this: I am currently living in England and working as a volunteer in the retail shop of Pxxxxxx Dxxxxxxx Sxxxxxx Axxxxxx.]

I completed my studies of in Management at the University of XXXX in France. During my internships in Paris and Strasbourg I developed organisational skills, the ability to cooperate within international teams, and to work independently.

During my studies , I supported the International Student Welcome at XXXX Club. In addition to this, I had the opportunity to successfully lead a team and organised events within music festivals for international public in France and Poland.

[I am not sure what you mean by music festivals for international public. Do you mean the music festival showcased international musicians? You should clarify this statement and then we can sort out the grammar afterward.]

I am dynamic and rigorous. I like learning languages, and I am fluent in French and Spanish. I enjoy experiencing different cultures and building relationships. I wish to use my skills in at YYYY University.

In addition to my academic qualifications and prior experience in the industry, I also believe that my resume exhibits strong potential for development. For these reasons I feel that I would be an asset to YYYY University.

My name is Daniela..... I am delighted to submit my application for the TTTTTT role as advertised in Staff Recruitment.

I have completed my studies of Management at University of XXXX , France. During my internships in Paris and Strasbourg I developed organisational skills, the ability to cooperate within international teams, and to work independently. I have been able to significantly enhance my understanding of ..... . My aspiration to join ......arouse out of strong conviction that my skills would be best utilized in the role.

During my studies, In addition to my studies I have been very active during my university life, I supported the International Student Welcome at XXXX Club, in addition I had the opportunity to successfully lead a team and organised events within music festivals for international public in France and Poland.

I am dynamic and rigorous. I like learning languages, I am fluent in French and Spanish. I enjoy experiencing different cultures and building relationships. I wish to use my skills in YYYY University.

In addition to my academic qualifications and prior experience in the industry, I believe an opportunity at ..... will support me in my future endeavors. I also believe that my resume exhibits strong potential for development. For these reasons I feel that I would be an asset to YYYY University. I look forward to hearing from you soon and discuss my application further.

Your sincerely.

Daniela

Please help me with my mistakes

I am writing to apply for the position of TTTTTT as advertised in Staff Recruitment. I am enclosing my CV, as requested.

I am currently living in England and working as a volunteer in PDSA, Retail Shop

I completed my studies of Management at University of XXXX, France. During my internships in Paris and Strasbourg I developed organizational skills, the ability to cooperate within international teams, and to work independently.

During my studies, I supported the International Student Welcome at XXXX Club in addition I had the opportunity to successfully lead a team and organised events within music festivals for international public in France and Poland.

I am dynamic and rigorous. I like learning languages, I am fluent in French and Spanish, I enjoy experiencing different cultures and building relationships. I wish to use my skills in YYYY University.

In addition to my academic qualifications and prior experience in the industry, I also believe that my resume exhibits strong potential for development. For these reasons I feel that I would be an asset to YYYY University.

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