4 weeks to get ready. (informal letter)
Hi Jo.
4 week aren't many at all, but as you don't start from 0, you will be able to succeed if you are motivated. Let's see what you can do.
Firstly, get in touch with my friend Davide. He studied sports sciences at the university and now are working as a personal trainer in a gym as well as a coach in a basketball team. He may definitely suggest you a great training plan to spoil these few days at the best. If you don't know him well, don't worry. Mention my name. If you mention my name, he will be glad to help you.
As far as I'm concerned, if I were you, I would change my diet immediately. You must cut down junk food and sugary drinks and go for food that helps you to get in shape. You can't afford to allow yourself even a beer. You will probably work out every day so don't forget to rest. You can't do your best without recharging your body.
I'm sure you will make. Let me know how it goes.
Go to running now!
Paolo.
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This notebook entry is fully understandable and has some good use of casual expressions that fit the desired format of an informal letter. I would make the minor changes shown below:
4 weeks to get ready. (informal letter)
Hi Jo.4 weeks aren't many at all is not much time, but as you don't start from 0, you will be able to succeed if you are motivated. Let's see what you can do.
Firstly First, get in touch with my friend Davide. He studied sports sciences at the university and now are is working as a personal trainer in a gym as well as a coach in on a basketball team. He may definitely can suggest for you a great training plan to spoil these few days at the best to use your time to best advantage. If you don't know him well, don't worry. Mention my name. If you mention my name, he will be glad to help you.
As far as I'm concerned, if I were you, I would change my diet immediately. You must cut down junk food and sugary drinks and go for food foods that helps help you to get in shape. You can't afford to allow yourself even a beer. You will probably work out every day so don't forget to rest. You can't do your best without recharging your body.
I'm sure you will make it. Let me know how it goes.
Go to running I'm going to now! (If you are really going running). Got to run now! (If you are just using this as a closing to your letter.)
Paolo.
Notes on a few of my changes:
"4 weeks is not much time" sounds as if it is incorrect pairing of a plural subject "weeks" with a singular verb "is". Actually, "4 weeks" is treated as a label or name for the single unit of time allotted by Jo.
"may definitely" juxtaposes a conditional state with an absolute state - it is an oxymoron.
"If you don't know him well . . . " is a logical flaw, since you are making the introduction yourself.
These are rather detailed comments, but I judge from the generally high ability level you have shown that this is your desired level of scrutiny.
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