Technology changes people*s life As the technology*s developing,lives of people have been greatly changed in many aspects. Years ago,people communicate with each other by telephone,now th

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周玉丽

Technology changes people*s life As the technology*s developing,lives of people have been greatly changed in many aspects. Years ago,people communicate with each other by telephone,now they send free voice message or send email to connect .more and more young people would like to put news into friends circle of Wechat. It is a very popular chat App in China.For K-12 students, they can gain the konwledge from internet,not only from teacher,so teacher becomes a guider,not a authority of knowledge. Currently,People can make friends by some international platform,like skype,twitter,QQ and so on,they are not limited in their own counties.This can broaden their horizon and enlarge their social net, this may be beneficial to their career achievement. People always communicate on line,which will have some negative effect to their communicative skills.In addition,they may be helpless when they cannot solve the relationship problems. I think technology brings many benefits to lives of people,but it has two sides,which need we avoid the negetive effects as much as possible.

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Technology changes people's life

As the technology*s develops[1], the lives of people have been greatly changed in many aspects.
Years ago, people communicated with each other by telephone, now they send free voice messages or send emails to connect. More and more young people would like to put news[2] into their Wechat friends circle. It is a very popular chat App in China. For K-12 students, they can gain the knowledge from the internet, not only from their teacher, so teacher becomes a guide, r not a authority of knowledge.
Currently, people can make friends using an international platform, like Skype, Twitter, QQ and so on, they are not limited to their own counties[countries?].This can broaden their horizons and enlarge their social net, this may [even?] be beneficial to their career achievement.
People always communicate on line, which will have some negative effects on their communication skills. In addition, they may be helpless when they cannot solve their relationship problems.
I think technology brings many benefits to the lives of people, but it has two sides, which we need we to avoid the negative effects of as much as possible.

Red is errors, pink is more natural language, yellow is (usually?) a punctuation highlight.

PLEASE try to get your punctuation correct. You got a few correct, but you had a lot of spaces missing. It takes a lot of effort to highlight every correction on here. You need a space after almost any punctuation, such as .,!?;:... the only complicated ones are paired ones such as <>{}[]""'', where the spacing is on the outside. Getting that wrong is a very obvious problem to any educated westerner, and makes your writing look a lot worse than it really is.

[1] or 'As technology is developing' (it's better not to abbreviate to y's )

in terms of your essay, I think that using the phone is still quite common in most places other than China! China is quite unique in using voice messaging rather than calls (and Wechat rather than txt), and to the level that they do use it. In most countries, people don't actually need a backup battery!!!

[2] I'm not sure what you mean about 'put news into' - do you mean how people put links in their feed?

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