The future of voting system, the power of the Internet.
I have read an article about inefficiency of the current voting system in the United States. Voters need to find the name of the candidates they want to choose and make a small mark next to it. In this case, there is a possible thread that people with poor eyesight might make a mark next to the name of candidates they are not choosing, especially when there are some similar names next to each other. If we introduce digitalized tablets instead of papers, it makes it possible to create popup messages on the screen to make sure the voters are choosing the correct name by saying "You are about to choose XXX. Are you sure?". Nowadays, computer technologies have a lot of improvement to be friendly to use. By making this digital system as simple as possible, we can cause the result of these mistakes lesser and lesser
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The future of voting system, the power of the Internet.
I have read an article about inefficiency of the current voting system in the United States. Voters need to find the name of the candidates they want to choose and make a small mark next to it. In this case, there is a possible thread that people with poor eyesight might make a mark next to the name of candidates they are not choosing, especially when there are some similar names next to each other. If we introduce digitalized tablets instead of papers, it makes it possible to create popup messages on the screen to make sure the voters are choosing the correct name by saying "You are about to choose XXX. Are you sure?". Nowadays, computer technologies have a lot of improvement to be friendly to use. By making this digital system as simple as possible, we can cause the result of these mistakes lesser and lesser1) The word you probably mean was Threat, which is something that puts another thing in danger. The word Thread means a long thin strand of something, such as string or cotton.
2) This isn't actually incorrect, though it should be 'improvements', not improvement. Most English speakers would prefer to word it as 'Nowadays, computer technologies have a lot of improvements to make them user-friendly.'
3) This part of the sentence is confusing. I think you meant to say 'we can make these mistakes less and less frequently.' or 'we can cause these mistakes to happen less and less frequently.
Generally however, very well written. The whole work feels quite formal, which may have been the tone you were aiming for. If it wasn't the tone you wanted, try using more abbreviations, such as it's and we're, which are used more often in informal speech. The full forms (it is and we are) are used along with stressing one of the words to emphasize in everyday speech, but are expected in formal works, especially academic ones.
The following is a small lesson on suffixes, which you may find interesting, or may wish to ignore.
There are two comparative suffixes, which are suffixes used to show the relationships between two things. The first is the comparative -er. This is used to say that something has more of the attached quality than what is is being compared to. For example this cat is smaller than my cat. The first cat has more of the 'small' quality, and of the suffix -er is added. The other suffix is called the superlative, which is -est. This suffix means the thing that is being described has the most of the quality the suffix is attached to. For example, 'This cat is the biggest cat I have ever seen.' So out of all the cats I have seen, this one has the most of the quality 'big', and so is the biggest. I should also note that -er can be used on verbs to describe a person who does something, such as runner or swimmer. These are called vocatives.
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