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Letter of application I wrote this letter of application to work as camp monitor in a summer camp. Could you help me to check it for mistakes, thanks ;) "Dear Mr Cunnighamm, I’m writing to apply for the post as camp monitor. I’m 22 years old and i have a degree in Computer Engineering. I’m a very energetic, creative and patient person. I like a lot doing different types of sports especially those in the nature. I’m also very keen on cuisine so i’ll be very glad to teach children the art of cooking. I have a medium level of english and i have a certificate that prove my B1 level. I worked lot of years during the summer at the Church club as the person who look after and play with children. I worked in a big team and with a lot of children. I’m very tolerant with other people and i’m the person that calm down possible fight that could be triggered in the team. The priest would be happy to provide a reference. I think i’m suitable for this job because i have a relevant experience and i love working with children. I’m really good to understand their needs. I know how to make children enjoy the camp. In addition i love all kinds of stuff that you do at the camp. I attach my CV and i’m sure i’m the person you’re searching for. I would be very grateful if you could send me a detailed description of all the activities you do at the camp. Yours sincerely, Riccardo Bertoglio."

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Letter of application

I wrote this letter of application to work as camp monitor in a summer camp. Could you help me to check it for mistakes, thanks ;)

"Dear Mr Cunnighamm,
I’m writing to apply for the post as camp monitor.
I’m 22 years old and I have a degree in Computer Engineering. I’m a very energetic, creative and patient person. I like a lot doing different types of sports especially those in the nature. I’m also very keen on cuisine so I’ll be very glad to teach children the art of cooking. I have a medium  level of english and I have a certificate that proves my B1 level.
I worked lot of years during the summer at the Church club as the person who look after and play with children. I worked in a big team and with which contained a lot of children. I’m very tolerant with other people and I’m the person that calms down possible fight that could be triggered in the team. The priest would be happy to provide a reference.
I think I’m suitable for this job because I have a relevant experience and I love working with children. I’m really good to at understanding their needs. I know how to make children enjoy the camp. In addition I love all kinds of stuff that you do at the camp.
I attach my CV and I’m sure I’m the person you’re searching for. I would be very grateful if you could send me a detailed description of all the activities you do at the camp.

Yours sincerely,
Riccardo Bertoglio."

Nearly perfect man. But " I " is always written in capital. You have to remember that. My correction is just for reference. I'm also waiting for a native speaker to help you with it. Good luck with your work.


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