Are there any wrong written in my comment?
This is my comment on an answer on Quora. ''Behavior under pressure reveals who we really are" ran the answer.
My comment:
Sweeping point. Behavior under pressure does reveal people, yet also strain people who are under too much pressure, for which I wouldn't call it as revealing.
Please help me revise what is above, I'd really appreciate your generosity and kindness.
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Are Is there anything wrong with my written in my comment?
This is my comment on an answer on Quora. ''Behavior under pressure reveals who we really are" ran was the answer.My comment:
Sweeping Good [1] point. Behavior under pressure does reveal something about people, [2] yet also puts a strain people on {better: stresses} those who are under too much pressure, for which I wouldn't call it say is as revealing.
Please help me revise what is written above, I'd really appreciate your generosity and kindness.
1. "Sweeping point" is not something we say. Suggestion is to use "Good point" or "Salient point" to show agreement.
2. "Reveal people" is also not something we say. It implies that you are "physically uncovering" people, such as if they had been hiding under a blanket.
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I had commented on an answer given to a question posted on Quora; the answer the person gave ran like this : ''Behavior under pressure reveals who we really are."
The following was my comment on what was the person reply:
" What you said might be true, but is it not also true to say that a person who is under pressure will reveal anything, even though he has nothing to reveal."
Note> Behavior under pressure > sounds like the person is under torture. > behaviour exhibited under stressful circumstances ??
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i appreciate your trial..!! that was nice..!! but i think it can be written in straight to the point
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