The trip in June
Hi. It's been a while. Let me write about our trip.
In June, I went to on a trip to Singapore with my sister.
It was my first time to go there and I like Singapore now because the city was very clean and sort of futuristic. But not only that actually, it has a lot of beauty nature. Also food was delicious and most of the people I met there were very friendly! I like it!!
We stayed at Marina Bay Sands which I really wanted to stay the while time since I saw this hotel on the TV show. We swam in the pool on the rooftop and the view from there was magnificent. One of my dream came true!
We went to Universal Studio Singapore, 1-Altitude (the amazing bar which has the highest views in Singapore.), Haw Par Villa, and so on. We've done lots of enjoyable things but we had only 3 days there so it wasn't enough to do everything what I wanted.
It was short trip but I had a great time.
I really like Singapore and I think I'll go there again!!
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The trip in June
Hi. It's been a while. Let me write about our trip.In June, I went to on a trip to Singapore with my sister.
It was my first time to go going there and I liked it Singapore now because the city was very clean and sort of futuristic. But not only that actually, it has a lot of beauty nature (perhaps "natural beauty"?). Also the food was delicious and most of the people I met there were very friendly! I liked it!!
We stayed at Marina Bay Sands which whereI really wanted to stay the while time since (ever since) I saw this hotel on the ("a" instead of "the", if you use "the" the specific T.V. show needs to be mentioned) TV show. We swam in the pool on the rooftop and the view from there was magnificent. One of my dreams came true!
We went to Universal Studio Singapore, 1-Altitude (the amazing bar which has the highest views in Singapore.), Haw Par Villa, and so on. We've done lots of enjoyable things but we had only (it's more natural to say "only had" instead of "had only")3 days there so it wasn't enough to do everything what I wanted.
It was short trip but I had a great time.
I really like Singapore and I think I'll go there again!!
Sounds like a very fun vacation, the rooftop bar sounds especially awesome!
Most of the mistakes are redundant words (which I crossed out), the rest are minor mistakes or unnatural sounding word order.
This whole thing was 100% understandable :) awesome job.
And next time I go to Singapore, I'll check out some of those places!
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