Poem / قصيدة

إنها/ انهارت الأرض من تحتنا
نبضت الأحلام من/ في قلوبنا
الموت في فنجان القهوة/ (الموت حلّ بِنا في فنجان قهوة كنّا قد شربنا)

يَكْمُنُ في كلماتنا وأبجدياتنا 

وعبرنا المحيط بالوحدة/ وحدنا
حتى وصلنا ساحل المرايا 
و كسرنا الزجاج أمامنا
ومزقنا الأوردة من أجسامنا/ أجسادنا
وندمنا على التاريخ/ تاريخنا

Jasmine: It looks like we have a poet on italki :) Your poem brought a smile to my face,

because first: I enjoyed reading it and trying to figure out what are the meanings behind 

it, and second: because you reminded me of me when I started on italki and how much I

liked to rhyme in English, it was a fun way to learn another language :))

Now you know well that it's hard to correct a poem, because there are no rules or even

punctuation in poetry, but I tried my best to give you some suggestions that could mean

something you wanted to say in that poem. I wasn't sure about the first line though;

whether you meant to say:

"It's the earth beneath us: إنها الأرض من تحتنا", or

"Earth collapsed beneath us: انهارت الأرض من تحتنا".

Keep up the good work Jasmine.

poem / قصيدة

poem / قصيدة