moving to another country
Hi, there. I wrote three paragraphs of my essay and I would like you to tell me my errors, please.
"Moving to another country is a very important and delicate decision. It really demands much planning and, abover all, that people should be aware of what it takes to dive into a totally different culture.
For the most part, we are faced with cultural practices that, at first sight, may scare us. That is why some people, although living in a different country from their home-country, are reluctant to letting go of their habitual customs and cling onto them.
When one moves into another country, one makes the decision to be part of its society, and thus to share its customs. That does not mean that one has to cast off one's old habits, but that one should at least be respectful of others' culture and understand that things socially accepted in one's home-country may be frowned upon in another one."
Thank you so much
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moving to another country
Hi, there. I wrote three paragraphs of my essay and I would like you to tell me my errors, please."Moving to another country is a very important and delicate decision. It really demands much planning and, abover all, that people should be aware of what it takes to dive into a totally different culture.
For the most part, we are faced with cultural practices that, at first sight, may scare us. That is why some people, although living in a different country from their home-country, are reluctant to letting go of their habitual customs and cling onto them.
When one moves into another country, one makes the decision to be part of its society, and thus to share its customs. That does not mean that one has to cast off one's old habits, but that one should at least be respectful of others' culture and understand that things socially accepted in one's home-country may be frowned upon in another one."
Thank you so much
Comment: Very good writing!
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moving to another country
Hi, there. I wrote three paragraphs of my essay and I would like you to tell me my errors, please."Moving to another country is a very important and delicate decision. It really demands much planning and, above all, that people should be aware of what it takes to dive into a totally different culture.
(A better, more parallel construction would be: It really demands much planning and, above all, being aware of what it takes to dive into a totally different culture.)
For the most part, we are faced with cultural practices that, at first sight, may scare us. That is why some people, although living in a different country from their home-country, are reluctant to let go of their habitual customs and still cling onto them.
When one moves into another country, one makes the decision to be part of its society, and thus to share its customs. That does not mean that one has to cast off one's old habits, but that one should at least be respectful of others' culture and understand that things socially accepted in one's home-country may be frowned upon in another one."
Thank you so much
Notes: This is a very well-crafted piece of writing. :)
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