Beauty of language learning Recently, I've met a lot of international friends. Some of them speak better English than I do, some of them don't. However, regardless our English ability, we tried our be

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Beauty of language learning Recently, I've met a lot of international friends. Some of them speak better English than I do, some of them don't. However, regardless our English ability, we tried our best to express ourselves in English. Especially when I talk to those who struggle to convey ideas in English, I see the beauty of language learning. The learning process is torturing. Yet, we are all trying so hard to speak fluent English. Why? Simply because of the primitive desire to connect with others. I've found this alluringly beautiful. This is also my motivation to continue learning - to connect with others.

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Beauty of language learning

Recently, I've met a lot of international friends. Some of them speak better English than I do, some of them don't. However, regardless our English ability, we try our best to express ourselves in English. Especially when I talk to those who struggle to convey ideas in English, I see the beauty of language learning. The learning process is torturing. Yet, we are all trying so hard to speak English fluently. Why? Simply because of the primitive desire to connect with others.

I've found this alluringly beautiful. This is also my motivation to continue learning - to connect with others.

tried--->try because you are mostly speaking in the present tense here

fluent English----> English fluently (either is okay, though the corrected version sounds more natural)

This is written very well, and I agree with what you have written :)

You used some nice vocabulary. The structure were generally good and your point was easily understood. I offer corrections and thoughts only to trigger deeper thought on the subject matter and help you further. Anyone is free to correct my corrections, if I have made a mistake.

The Beauty of Language Learning

Recently, I've met many international friends. Some of them speak better English than myself I do, while some of them others don't. However, In spite of our English abilities, we tried try our best to express ourselves in English. Especially when I talk to those who struggle to convey ideas in English, I see the beauty of language learning, particularly, when I speak with those who struggle to convey ideas in English. The learning process is torturing, yet we are all trying so hard to speak fluent English fluently. Why? We do this simply due to because of the our primitive desire to connect with others.

I've found I find this alluringly beautiful. This, and it is also my motivation to continue learning - to connect with others.

Explanation:

2. "a lot of" -> "Many" - Wordiness

3. "of them" stricken - Wordiness (Subject Implied)

4. 'I' -> "myself"

5. "do" deleted. Action implied.

6. Added conjunction "while" after the comma.

7. "However" -> "In spite of" - Term very generic, replacement is more descriptive.

8. OUR English ABILITIES - Agreement

9. "tried" -> "try" - Verb Tense Error: I'm assuming you're still in the act of trying when you communicate with these people.

10. "in English" stricken for wordiness - Implied

11. I rearranged the entire sentence starting with "I see the beauty..." The original form was not grammatically correct. "Especially" is generic.

12. Replaced "talk to" with "speak with." More accurately descriptive of the actions the writer is referring to.

13. Combined next two statements, using a common and "Yet" (already written).

14. "so hard" - strikes (wordiness) | "fluent" -> "fluently" and position in sentence changed

15. "Why?" (Rhetorical) strikes. | "simply" strikes for wordiness. Too idiomatic.

16. "because of" -> "due to" (generic) | "the" -> "our" (possession indicated)

17. Last sentence is fairly self-explanatory (character limit).

I don't vouch for the grammatical accuracy of the writing in my "Explanation". I'm tired now!

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