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Stop me [story] I can't stop, words flow and flow again, I have so many things to say, so many things to feel, so I'm writing, so I'm talking, I'm singing, screaming, because I want to live, but my breath is short, my heart is shaking violently, my mouth is closing, my thoughts continue, nothing can curb them, they are free, and here people don't like freedom, no, they throw it, they burn it, until the end I'll let my imagination live, because it's beautiful, sensitive, poetic sometimes, they will kill me for that, but I'm resisting, I will be an example for my brothers, for all people who fight to tell, who revolt, ready to be sacrificed, like me, my executioner is coming, he'll cut my throat, he'll put a dot at the end of my sentence.

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Stop me [story]

I can't stop, words flow and flow again, I have so many things to say, so many things to fell(tell/feel?), so I'm writing, so I'm talking, I'm singing, screaming, because I want to live, but my breathe is short, my heart is shaking violently, how to do, my mouth is closing, my thinkings thoughts continue, nothing can't curb them, they are free, and here people don't like freedom, no, they throw it, they burn it, until the end I'll let my imagination live, because it's beautiful, sensitive, poetic sometimes, they will kill me for that, but I'm resisting, I will be an example for my brothers, for all people who fight to tell, who revolt, ready to be sacrificed, like me, my executioner is coming, he'll cut my throat, he'll put a dot at the end of my sentence.

very good. not sure what you are trying to say with how to do ...how to be?


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Thanks @Karl I delated "how to do" and I changed "my thinkings continue'. Thanks for your reading!
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Hello Marie. Not bad. I will wait for a native speaker and not touch this. There are only a couple of parts that I would change, mainly "how to do" and "my thinkings continue". Rest of it seems good. No dots from me at the end of the sentence though. Take care.

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