Please correct it and make it more beautiful Ameriacan. Thank you so much!!
When I was young, I didn't have girlfiend. I just stayed with my mom and my grandmother all day. My mother love me so much, but she scares my father, so she can't protect me when my father beat me. But unlike my mother, my grandmother born my dad, so he must scares her. That is so luckily for me.
When young I was so naughty, so I would get the punishment, my dad would beat me. So, that maked me always thought that how to escaped beatting. And whenever I saw him took the wooden stick, immediately I run to my grandmother's house. My grandmother usually lied in bed. She was lying there and was chewing betel.
- Grandma, Grandmotherrrrrrr!!!! - I shouted and run to her.
- What happend, my boy? - My grandmother sit up and asked me
- My dad hit me!!! - I said
- Don't worry, come and lie with me!
My grandmother calmed me down and pulled me up into the bed. She hidden me on her back, so my dad can't saw me.
Later, my dad came to her house with the wooden stick and asked
- Mom, Do you see my son, Ngạn?? Did he run to here?
- No - My grandmother replied
I lie behind her back and my heart skip a beat. I just only felt better when I heard footstep walking far away.
In that time, I afraid to come home immediately. I always stayed and played with my grandma.
- Grandma, can you scratch my back? please!!! - I coddle
She didn't deny my request. She told me about her storys. The story that I learn it by heart. She don't have many storys.
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Please correct it and make it more beautiful Ameriacan. Thank you so much!!
When I was young, I didn't have girlfiend. I just stayed with my mom and my grandmother all day. My mother loved me so much, but she was afraid of my father, so she couldn't protect me when my father beat me. But unlike my mother, my grandmother was my father's mother, so he was scared of her, and that is so lucky for me.When I was young I was so naughty, so I would be punished and my dad would beat me. This always made me think of how I could escape him and his beatings, and whenever I saw him grab the wooden stick, I would immediately run to my grandmother's house. My grandmother was usually in bed. She was lying there and was chewing betel.
- Grandma, Grandmotherrrrrrr!!!! - I would shout and run to her.
- What happened, my boy? - My grandmother would sit up and ask me
- My dad hit me!!! - I said
- Don't worry, come and lie with me!
My grandmother calmed me down and pulled me up into the bed. She hid me behind her back, so my dad couldn't see me.
Later, my dad came to her house with the wooden stick and asked
- Mom, have you seen my son, Ngạn?? Did he run here?
- No - My grandmother replied
I lay behind her back, my heart skipping a beat, only feeling better when I heard his footsteps walking away.
After he left, I was afraid to come home immediately. I always stayed and played with my grandma.
- Grandma, can you scratch my back? please!!! - I coddle
She didn't deny my request. She told me about her stories and I learned them by heart. She don't have many stories.
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When I was young, I didn't have ( a )girlfiend. I just stayed with my mom and my grandmother all day. My mother lov(ed) me so much, but she scar(ed) my father, so she can't(->could not) protect me when my father beat me. But unlike my mother, (my grandmother born my dad , so he must scares her"-> It is not necessary") my grandmother did not scare him . That is(was) so luckily(lucky) for me.=> Should be (I was safe when I stayed with my grandmother)
(When young-> no need) I was very naughty in my childhood. Thus "so" I received a few (would get the )punishments from my dad(my dad would beat me). That maked me thought about how to escape beatting? And whenever I saw him took the wooden stick, immediately I run to my grandmother's house. My grandmother usually lied in bed chewed the betel.
- Grandma, Grandmotherrrrrrr!!!! - I shouted and run(ran) to her.
- What happend, my boy? - My grandmother sit(sat) up and asked me
- My dad hit me!!! - I said
- Don't worry, come and lie with me!
My grandmother calmed me down and pulled me up into the bed. She hidden(hid) me on her back, so my dad can't(could not) saw me.
Later, my dad came (to her house) in with the wooden stick and asked:
- Mom, Do you see my son, Ngạn?? Did he run to(into) here?
- No - My grandmother replied
I lie(lied) behind her back and I stayed out of him(my heart skip a beat). I (just) could only (felt)-> feel better when I heard (the)footstep walking far away.
In(At) that time, I was still afraid to come(--> go back) home immediately. I always stayed and played with my grandma.
- Grandma, can you scratch my back? Please!!! - I coddle.
She didn't deny my request. She told me about her storys->>stories. (The story)-> Those stories that I learn it->them by heart.
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