Hi, Could you read my project's description?
Hi, my writing is quite long, but I really need your help.
I want to know about the awkward sentences and my shortcomings.
Thanks for your time.
[JAN : record a moment in traveling with others]
‘JAN’ is an interface based on gesture and it makes the moment more meaningful with people I love.
People raise their glasses, drink and make a toast for their networking, happiness and harmony in various countries. A Clinking the glasses together can be done to have each other, act as a kindling the atmosphere and people are reading something into it with a toast.
The theme ‘Traveling with friends’ also means the continuity of the moment for the toast. Traveling with friends can be as long as we have each other and we spend all of the time together from the travel arrangement to completion.
You can feel more attractive and have an empathy with friends when using the action like proposing the toast in moment we prepared, experienced and shared together.
Propose the toast to your friends with pressing the ‘Cheers!’ button.
Receive the toast from your friends and record the moment.
Pleas toast each other if you are there together.
The memory of traveling with you and your friends will be record.
Thank you again. :)
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[JAN : record a moment in traveling with others]
‘JAN’ is a gesture based interface based on gesture and it which enhances the those small, meaningful moments with your loved ones. more meaningful with people I love.
People in various countries raise their glasses, make a toast, and drink in order to network, convey happiness, and promote harmony. The clinking the glasses together can be done to have each other, act as a kindling the atmosphere and people are reading something into it with a toast.
The theme (of my project is?)‘Traveling with friends’ (which) also means represents the continuity of the moment for the toast. Traveling with friends is not just the trip itself, but includes can be as long as we have each other and all of the time spent together, from the first travel arrangement to the final goodbye. completion.
You can strengthen your bonds of friendship and nurture camaraderie more attractive and have an with your friends by when using the action like proposing a the toast in a moment you prepared for, experienced and or shared together.
Propose the toast to your friends with by pressing the ‘Cheers!’ button.
Receive (Accept?) the toast from your friends and to record the moment.
Pleas Toast each other if when you are there together.
The memory of traveling with you and your friends will be recorded and saved.
Notes:
1. The clinking the glasses together can be done to have each other, act as a kindling the atmosphere and people are reading something into it with a toast. : I don't understand what you are trying to say with this sentence. It seems to be saying the same thing as the last sentence...
2. You mention a theme, "traveling with friends", in a way that makes it seem like you had written about "traveling with friends" earlier, but you had not.
a. The theme of my project is "Traveling with Friends", which represents.... - If you haven't referenced the theme before
b. The theme "Traveling with Friends" represents... - If you have referenced the theme before.
3. I still don't understand exactly what the app does. Does it take a picture? A video? On whose phone? Does it just record a video from one phone and send it to everybody? Does it take pictures from everyone's phone and make a collage?
Good work. If you have any questions let me know.
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