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New web Recently, it has been released youtube kids, the new youtube web only for children. The contents are limitated and all of them under an strictic parental control. The point is: was it really necessary?I don't think so just because those children can access to the "normal" youtube instead of their youtube. New technology is very important nowadays. Thanks to it, we can talk with friends from different countries in a similar way like face to face because of the videocalls, we also can keep in contact with what is happening in the world, and some other advantages that everybody knows. From my point of view, kids should play outside, with their friends, wiithout using technology. The technology can be negative to their development because they need to discover the world by themselves, know new places and meet new friends that enrich their future lifes.

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Recently, it has been released youtube kids has been released, the new youtube website only for children. The contents are limited and all of them under an strictic parental control. The point is: was it really necessary?I don't think so just because those children can access to the "normal" youtube instead of their own youtube.
New technology is very important nowadays. Thanks to it, we can talk with friends from different countries in a similar way like face to face because of the videocalls, we also can keep in contact with what is happening in the world, and some other advantages that everybody knows.
From my point of view, kids should play outside, with their friends, wiithout using technology. The technology can be negative to their development because they need to discover the world by themselves, get to know new places and meet new friends that enrich their future lives.

 

Very well written. My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.

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