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An Unforgettable Experience My life is just like a string of beautiful pearl necklace, and every unforgettable experience that happened when I was a child all made the necklace more and more captivating and glittering. Now, I want to pick up one of them to share with you. It was a morning that I found I left my pencil box at home when I got to school. ” Oh, my god! How careless I am! ” I said in a low voice. At that time, our teacher came into the classroom, gave outexamination paper and asked us to finish it during the class. I was really nervous. Looking around the classroom, I found the class all started to write, but I just sat there and never wrote a word. “ Why don’t you write? ” Said my deskmate. I told her that I forgot to bring my pencil box. “ Now, I can lend one to you! ” She said happily. Then, she opened her pencil box and gave a pen to me. Looking at her warm smile, I realized the smile is the sunshine that reaches the bottom of my heart, and it’s the warmest one I’ve never felt before. Never have I forgotten the experience that my deskmate helped me.

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An Unforgettable Experience

My life is just like a string of beautiful real necklace, and every unforgettable experience that happened when I was a child all made the necklace more captivating and glittering. Now, I want to pick up one of them to share with you.
It was a morning that I found my pencil box at home when I got to school. ” Oh, my god! How careless I am! ” I said in a low voice. At that time, our teacher came into the classroom, gave outexamination paper and asked us to finish it during the class. I was really nervous. Looking around the classroom, I found the class all started to write, but I just sat there and never wrote a word.
“ Why don’t you write? ” Said my deskmate. I told her that I forgot to bring my pencil box. “ Now, I can lend one to you! ” She said happily. Then, she opened her pencil box and gave a pen to me. Looking at her warm smile, I realized the smile is the sunshine that reaches the bottom of my heart, and it’s the warmest one I’ve never felt before.
Never have I forgotten the experience that my deskmate helped me.
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An Unforgettable Experience

My life is just like a string of beautiful pearl necklace, and every unforgettable experience that happened when I was a child all made the necklace more and more captivating and glittering. Now, I want to pick up one of them to share with you.
It was a morning that I found I left my pencil box at home when I got to school. ” Oh, my god! How careless I am! ” I said in a low voice. At that time, our teacher came into the classroom, gave outexamination paper and asked us to finish it during the class. I was really nervous. Looking around the classroom, I found the class all started to write, but I just sat there and never wrote a word.
“ Why don’t you write? ” Said my deskmate. I told her that I forgot to bring my pencil box. “ Now, I can lend one to you! ” She said happily. Then, she opened her pencil box and gave a pen to me. Looking at her warm smile, I realized the smile is the sunshine that reaches the bottom of my heart, and it’s the warmest one I’ve never felt before.
Never have I forgotten the experience that my deskmate helped me.

...a beautiful string of pearls...

...when I was a child made...

...I had left...

"Oh my god! How careless I am!,"

...gave out examination papers and asked us to finish them...

deskmate is not really a word - we would say classmate in English

...I had forgotten...

...it's the warmenst one that I've ever felt.

I think you should work a little on your past perfect and present perfect grammar. Past perfect is often used when telling or writing a story. For example: I met my best friend in Shanghai in 2014. At that time I had lived in Shanghai for 2 years. 

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