Cambridge IELTS writing practice Hey guys I am 陳瑾文 from China. I am now using the spare time on summer break to prepare for my first Cambridge IELTS exam which would be in August. This is my first time writing an IELTS essay. I am hoping that there could be some people helping me check my grammar and giving me some advice on how to write it in a better way. I don't usually use many big words in my essays since my vocab is kind of poor. I'd appreciate it if you guys could give me some more advanced level words that I could replace some or those simple words in it with. I am also hoping that there could be some people with the experience of teaching IELTS to tell me how much of score I am likely to get in the exam if I write my essays like this. Thanks a lot guys! Here we go~ Topic: Some people think that children should obey the rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problem themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. My essay: Children are expected to obey some basic rules mostly no matter at home or in school. There is no doubt that some specific rules could help children understand how things work better. However, I believe that there could be more disadvantages than advantages if setting rules too strict. The main idea of establishing rules is to help children understand things better. Like how to behave properly in front of others and how to get along with others which could be important skills in their future life. If there is no rule about what kind of things they are not supposed to do, they are not likely to figure out the way of dealing with things by themselves in adulthood. However, establishing rules too strict could lead to negative influence on children because they might start to rely on the rules too heavily. If they are used to following rules that set by others it could be hard for them to solve problems independently in the future. For example, they might find it not that possible to make plans by themselves. In this case, how could you expect them to be successful in their future career? From my point of view, it is critical to help the children to save their creativity when they still have it and the very first necessary thing to do is to give them enough space where they could develop what they have instead of setting strict rules for them which doesn’t seem to be helping.