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A Kayak Trip went wrong Mary is a 22 year-old girl from Canada. She dicided to go on a solo kayaking trip through Souther Alaska. While in her trip she stopped at a forest service cabin for a quick break leaving her kayak parked on the beach. Mary says that she is taking this kayak trip to meditate and connect herself with nature. While she is unpacking and moving all her things inside the cabin, she hears a noise and goes to the door to see what it is. To her surprise there is a bear slamming his paws onto her kayak. Finally the bear manages to flip the kayak over until this is wrecked. Bears are supposed to be asleep during that season but it wasn't the case for this one. Mary knows that the only way to get out of there is by boat so if her keyak is destroyed she has no way to leave the forest service cabin. With no other option at her disposal Mary continues to plead with the misterious bear. Amanzinly it works. The huge predator finally backs off. Mary survived the bear attack without a scratch but we can't say the same of her kayak.

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A Kayak Trip Gone Wrong

Mary is a 22 year-old girl from Canada. She decided to go on a solo kayaking trip through Southern Alaska. While on her trip she stopped at a forest service cabin for a quick break, leaving her kayak parked on the beach. Mary said that she was taking this kayak trip to meditate and connect herself with nature.

While she was unpacking and moving all her things inside the cabin, she heard a noise and went to the door to see what it was. To her surprise there was a bear slamming his paws onto her kayak. Finally, the bear managed to flip the kayak over until it was wrecked. Bears are supposed to be asleep during that season but it wasn't the case for this one.

Mary knew that the only way to get out of there was by boat so if her kayak was destroyed she had no way to leave the forest service cabin. With no other option at her disposal Mary continued to plead with the mysterious bear. Amazingly it worked. The huge predator finally backed off. Mary survived the bear attack without a scratch but we can't say the same of her kayak.

Your writing and your vocabulary is very good but make sure that if you start a story in the past tense, you stick to this through the whole story :)

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