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My First Year at College When I was a high school student,I thought the life in college must be very colorful and free and I would be much happier.However,the real situation is just beyond my anticipation. We were taking military training during the first week at college.After a day's training,I was selected to be a military reporter,so I didn't have to go on with the millitary training.That was really exciting.Then I woke up at 8:00 every day and have nothing to do.To past the time,I became watch TV series which I wanted to see for a long time but I was too busy to watch at high school.At first,I felt delighted.But emptiness and boredom followed.I was deeply perplexed. To enrich my life,I took part in many competitions.I always stayed up so late to prepare for the competitions that I was exhausted and inactive every day.Besides,I joined so many clubs that I had a lot of work to do.I had my hands full but I didn't know what on earth I was busy with. During the second semester,I started to make plans and tried to find out the things which I really want to do.As a student,the main task is study.So I adjusted my route and put more efforts into study.In my spare time,I would do some reading rather than watch TV series.And I didn't stay up any more.Now,I am living a fulfilling,meaningful and healthy college life. No one can grow up without bewilderment.Though I spend my first year of college with some frustrations,I still find the right way and become more mature.That is very satisfying,isn't it?

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My First Year at College

When I was a high school student, I thought that college life must be very colorful and carefree and I would be much happier. However, the reality was just beyond my anticipation.
We were taking military training during the first week at college. After a day of it, I was selected to be military reporter so I didn't have to go on with the training. That was really exciting. Then I woke up at 8:00 every day with nothing to do. To pass the time, I watched some TV series which I had wanted to see for a long time but was too busy to watch at high school. At first I felt delighted but then emptiness and boredom followed. I was deeply perplexed.

To enrich my life, I took part in many competitions. I always stayed up so late to prepare for the competitions that each day I was exhausted and lethargic. Also I joined so many clubs which meant a lot more work. I had my hands full but I didn't know what on earth I was busy with.
During the second semester, I started to make plans and tried to find out what I really want to do. As a student, your main task is to study. So I adjusted my plans and put more efforts into study. In my spare time, I would read rather than watch TV series. And I didn't stay up any more. Now I live a fulfilling, meaningful and healthy college life.
No one can grow up without bewilderment. Though I was sometimes frustrated during spend my first year of college, I still found the right way and became more mature. That is very satisfying, isn't it?

Very well written!

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Thank you for you correction.
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Not bad. A few places where the essay can be improved, but no super-serious issues, the meaning is clear and for the most part, the grammar is approximately correct. 1. "However,the real situation is just beyond my anticipation." Better to say "However, the experience has surpassed my expectations" 2. "I became watch TV series" should be "I began to watch TV Series" 3. "To enrich my life" Is grammatical and correctly used, but native speakers rarely would say that. It sounds a bit weird. 4. "So I adjusted my route" Again, native speakers wouldn't use this phraseology, even though it is correct. "So I decided to put more effort into studying" would suffice. 5. There are several run-on sentences. In written speech avoid starting sentences with "And", although this is acceptable in spoken English, it is bad practice and you should never do it in written English. 6. "Bewilderment" is not the right adjective to use here. I am not 100% certain exactly what you mean, although I get the general gist, it kinda makes sense, but it's not a brilliant usage of the word. 7. "I still find the right way" should be "I still found the right way and became more mature"

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