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30天中文写作挑战 (27/30) – 看书:Phobos
现在我现在在看一本书,叫《Phobos》。故事是发生在未来, 美国政府售卖公共基础设施为了以充塞偿还债务。
一个民营私人企业买下了Nasa——美国国家航空航天局,而并决定组织一场去前往火星的电视真人秀。
十二人,六个女孩和六个男孩,(需要在前往火星的期间)寻找爱情。(I don't really understand the purpose of the show~)
女孩们和男孩们分别住在分别不同的地方。
每星期,他们可以邀请一个冒牌者追求者为谈谈进行六分钟的交流。(what does the word "pretendant" mean? Is it a French word or something else ? )
在他们正到达火星以前,他们必须得点选择一个人,并且结婚。
可是他们不知道火星的人居栖居地有鼓掌故障, 他们不可以无法住在这里生存。
电视真人秀的制作者正计划引发一场意外。
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Hi, today I wanted to talk about the book I am currently reading (I recommand it!). Thank you in advance for your corrections! Here is the English translation:
I am currently reading a book called « Phobos ». The story is that, in the future, the US government sells public infrastructure in order to cover their debts. A private company buy the Nasa, and decide to organize a reality show to go on Mars. 12 people, 6 girls and 6 boys, search their love. Girls and boys live separately. Every week, they can invite a pretendant for a 6 minutes talk. Right before arriving on Mars, they must choose one and get married. But they don’t know that the habitat on Mars have malfunctions and that they cannot live there. The show crew is planning to provoke an accident.
30天中文写作挑战 (27/30) – 看书:Phobos
现在我在看一本书,叫《Phobos》。/现在我在看一本叫《phobos》的书故事是,在未来, 美国政府|为了抵偿/偿还充塞债务|(出)卖公共基础设施。
一个民营企业买了Nasa,而(且)决定组织(一场)去火星(的)电视真人秀。
十二个人,六个女孩和六个男孩,(寻)找爱情。
女孩们和男孩们(分别)居住在。
每星期,他们可以请一个冒牌者谈交谈六分钟。
他们正到火星以前,他们得点一个,并且结婚。
可是他们不知道火星的驻地/住所有故障鼓掌, 他们不可以住在那这里。
电视真人秀的制作者(的)计划出(了)意外。
Hi, today I wanted to talk about the book I am currently reading (I recommand it!). Thank you in advance for your corrections! Here is the English translation:
I am currently reading a book called « Phobos ». The story is that, in the future, the US government sells public infrastructure in order to cover their debts. A private company buy the Nasa, and decide to organize a reality show to go on Mars. 12 people, 6 girls and 6 boys, search their love. Girls and boys live separately. Every week, they can invite a pretendant for a 6 minutes talk. Right before arriving on Mars, they must choose one and get married. But they don’t know that the habitat on Mars have malfunctions and that they cannot live there. The show crew is planning to provoke an accident.
30天中文写作挑战 (27/30) – 看书:Phobos
现在我看一本书叫《Phobos》。故事是在未来, 美国政府卖公共基础设施为了充塞债务。
一个民营企业买Nasa,而决定组织去火星电视真人秀。
十二人,六女孩和六男孩,找爱情。
女孩们和男孩们住在分别。
每星期,他们可以请一个冒牌者为谈谈六分钟。
他们正到火星以前,他们得点一个,并且结婚。
可是他们不知道火星的人居有鼓掌, 他们不可以住在这里。
电视真人秀的制作者计划意外。
现在我正在看的这本书叫《Photos》
故事发生在未来,讲述的是,美国政府卖掉公共设施为了偿还国债。En réalité, je ne connais pas ce mot ''充塞' il n'y a pas beaucoup de personnes qui l'utilisent.
一个民营企业买了Nasa,决定组织去火星参加电视真人秀。
一共十二个人,六男六女,寻找他们的爱情。Ta phrase n'est pas incorrecte mais juste un peu maladroite. Mais c'est normal pour les gens qui apprennent le chinois.
女孩们和男孩们是分开住的。分别 veut dire "dire au revoir"
每星期,他们可以邀请一个代表交谈六分钟。
他们赶到火星前,他们必须得选一个结婚。
可是他们不知道火星的人出现了故障,他们是不能住在这里的。
这是真人秀的策划人故意制造的一场“意外”。
Continue et Bravo pour ta persévérance, si tu as des questions, n'hesite pas..
30天中文写作挑战 (27/30) – 看书:Phobos
现在我看一本书叫《Phobos》。故事是发生在未来, 美国政府售卖公共基础设施为了充塞偿还债务。
一个民营私人企业买了Nasa,而并决定组织一场去火星的电视真人秀。
十二人,六个女孩和六个男孩,寻找他们的爱情。
女孩们和男孩们住在分别分开居住。
每星期,他们可以请其中一个冒牌者(I think you mean they need to invite everyone to have a talk。 everyweek only can invite one?)进行六分钟的谈话。
他们正到火星以前,他们得点选择一个,并且结婚。
可是他们不知道火星的人居居所有鼓掌故障, 他们不可以住在这里。
电视真人秀的制作者计划意外正计划引发一场事故
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I want to know the ending,hah,could you tell me?
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Hi, today I wanted to talk about the book I am currently reading (I recommand it!). Thank you in advance for your corrections! Here is the English translation:
I am currently reading a book called « Phobos ». The story is that, in the future, the US government sells public infrastructure in order to cover their debts. A private company buy the Nasa, and decide to organize a reality show to go on Mars. 12 people, 6 girls and 6 boys, search their love. Girls and boys live separately. Every week, they can invite a pretendant for a 6 minutes talk. Right before arriving on Mars, they must choose one and get married. But they don’t know that the habitat on Mars have malfunctions and that they cannot live there. The show crew is planning to provoke an accident.
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