Be happy now.
Yesterday, I heard that my senior suddently fell to the ground and his heart stopped working. He hasn't got any illness before. He's older than me about two or three years, so he's around twenty nine years old, I guess. It reminded me that anything in this life can happen any time. You don't know exactly how many days you've got or when will you not be able to work. If tomorrow won't come, I'd feel so sad that I still didn't do many things I really want to do. So I should do whatever makes myself happy right now.
Fortunately for my senior, at the time he was in a hospital with doctor friends then he's got treatments in time. Now he's conscious and getting better.
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Be happy now.
Yesterday, I heard that my senior suddenly fell to the ground and his heart stopped working. He hasn't got any illness before. He's older than me for about two or three years, so he's around twenty nine years old, I guess. It reminded me that anything in this life can happen any time. You don't know exactly how many days you've got or when will you not be able to work. If tomorrow won't come, I'd feel so sad that I still didn't do many things I really want to do. So I should do whatever makes myself happy right now.Fortunately for my senior, at the time he was in a hospital with a doctor who is also his friend, he's got treatments in time. Now he's conscious and getting better.
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Be happy now.
Yesterday, I heard that my older brother suddenly fell to the ground and his heart stopped working. He hasn't had any illness before. He's older than me about two or three years, so he's around twenty nine years old, I guess. It reminded me that anything in this life can happen at any time. You don't know exactly how many days you've got or when will you not be able to work. If tomorrow won't come, I'd feel so sad that I still didn't do many things I really wanted to do. So I should do whatever makes me happy right now.Fortunately for my older brother, at the time he was in a hospital with doctor friends so he was treated in time. Now he's conscious and getting better.
Very well written!
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Sometimes word and phrase choices can be improved. For instance -
Instead of saying "He's older than me about two or three years, so he's around twenty nine years old, I guess"
say "He is around 29 years old and therefore only two or three years older than me."
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