My day, my thoughts
Just thoughts
I just lie down right now, it is at 12:38 a.m here . Then, I am trying to think what I have done, English thoughts, of course. And I thought : why not writing it on my notebook? So, the peoples can correct me, it would be better. Anyway, I have got up at 8 o'clock a.m, after I went to bathroom to brush my teeth and washing my face . I had my breakfast and brushed my teeth again . I studied a bit in the morning and read a book whose the name is 'The Lost Years', it seems cool . I made lunch for me and my uncle, because my godmother was at work . I cleaned the home and washed my shoes . Then, I studied again, that's cool ! For my heath, I ran at 5:30 p.m until 6:30 p.m, more or less it. So, when I arrived in home I took a shower, after it I ate bread and drank coffee. I studied again, watched a bit the football game , I drank soup and now I am right here, on my bed .
That's all, guys ! Can someone correct me ? Please, thank you.
Have a good day. :)
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My day, my thoughts
Just some thoughtsI have just lain down right now, it is 12:38 a.m here. I'm trying to think what I've done today, thinking in English, of course. And I thought : why not write it in my notebook, so people can correct me. That would be better. Anyway, I got up at 8 a.m., then I went to bathroom to brush my teeth and wash my face. I had my breakfast and brushed my teeth again. I studied a bit in the morning and read a book called, 'The Lost Years'. It seems cool. I made lunch for me and my uncle, because my godmother was at work. I cleaned the house and cleaned my shoes. Then, I studied again! I like to keep fit and healthy, so I went for a run at 5:30 p.m. I ran for about an hour. When I arrived home I took a shower, and then I ate some bread and drank coffee. I studied again, watched a bit of the football game. Then I had some soup and now I am right here, on my bed.
That's all, guys! Can someone correct me please? Thank you.
Have a good day. :)
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My day, my thoughts
Just thoughtsI just lie lay down right now; (or "I am finally lying down;" or "I am just now lying down") it is at 12:38 a.m here. Then, I am trying to think of what I have done today, (or, "I'm trying to think about what I did today." Past tense: "I started to think about what I did during the day.") English thoughts, of course. And I thought , why not writing write it on in my notebook? So, That way, the peoples can correct me, and it would will be better. Anyway, I got up at 8 o'clock (not wrong to say "o'clock", but not used informally) a.m, after I went to the bathroom to brush my teeth and washing my face. I had my (also not wrong, but sounds more formal than "I had breakfast") breakfast and brushed my teeth again. I studied a bit in the morning, and read a book whose the name is (More natural to say "A book called" or "a book titled"), 'The Lost Years'. It seemed cool. I made lunch for me and my uncle, because my godmother was at work. I cleaned the home house and washed my shoes. Then I studied again; that was cool! For my health, I ran at from 5:30 p.m until 6:30 p.m, more or less.(Or you can say, "I ran from about 5:30-6:30pm.") it. So, When I arrived in home I took a shower, after it I then ate bread and drank coffee. I studied again, watched a bit of the football game, I and drank soup. and Now I am right here, on my bed.
Be sure not to leave spaces between the end of sentences and punctuation. :)
That's all, guys ! Can someone correct me ? Please, thank you.
Have a good day. :)
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My day, my thoughts
Just thoughtsI'm just now lie lying down right now, it is 12:38 a.m here . Then, As I'm laying here, I am(I'm) trying to think what I have done did today, English thoughts, of course. And I thought to myself: why not writing write about it on in my notebook? So, the Peoples can correct me, it'll would be better. Anyway, I have got up at 8 o'clock a.m, after I went to the bathroom to brush my teeth and washing wash my face . I had my breakfast and brushed my teeth again . I studied a bit in the morning and read a book whose the name is called 'The Lost Years', it seems seemed cool . I made lunch for me and my uncle, because my godmother was at work . I cleaned the home and washed my shoes . Then, I studied again, that's cool ! For my heath, I ran at 5:30 p.m until about 6:30 p.m, more or less it. So, When I arrived in home I took a shower. after it I ate bread and drank coffee. I studied again, watched a bit of the football game. I drank some soup and now I am(I'm) right here, on my bed .
That's all, guys ! Can someone correct me ? Please, thank you.
Have a good day. :)
Sounds like a fun day :) Contractions sound more natural than long hand("I'm" instead of "I am"). Remember to stay in the same tense when writing a sentence! Otherwise good work :)
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