Applying for a course
Dear Sir /Madam,
I am writing to apply for a position in your Travel Writing Workshop,which was advertised in The Guardian last week.
I am from Spain and I have got my degree in Journalism recently with excellent marks in all the subjects. I can speak English and French fluently and I can get by in Chinese and Portuguese. What is more I have travelled to different countries in order to improve my language skills.
One day I would like to work in an important national newspaper,for this reason, I would like to attend your Travel Writing Workshop.Currently, I am doing my internship in a local newspaper,and by the end of July I will have finished it,so August 18th would be the most suitable date for me.
Furthermore I would be very grateful if you could send me a copy of the teaching programme.
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.If you need further information,please contact with me via e-mail at [email protected].
I hope to hearing back from you at your earliest.
Yours faithfully.
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Applying for a course
Dear Sir /Madam,I am writing to apply for a position in your Travel Writing Workshop, that which was advertised in The Guardian last week.
I am from Spain and I have got my a degree in Journalism recently with excellent marks in all the subjects. I can speak English and French fluently and I can get by in Chinese and Portuguese. What is more I have also traveled to different countries in order to improve my language skills.
One day I would like to work in with an important national newspaper company. For this reason, I would like to attend your Travel Writing Workshop. Currently, I am doing my internship in with a local newspaper, and by the end of July I will have finished it, so August 18th would be the most suitable date for me.
Furthermore I would be very grateful if you could send me a copy of the teaching program, or any materials that I could use to help further my studies.
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.If you need further information,please contact with me via e-mail at [email protected].
I hope to hearing back from you at your earliest.
Yours faithfully.
***for the blue sections***
*** I know this is a short passage, so you don't need to put much thought in it, but when saying that you have "good points in x,y, or z" you should use an example, or have a certain aspect highlighted.
For example:
I recently graduated with a degree in Asian studies. Because of this degree I was able to study many Asian cultures and learn how each culture globalizes, or accepts internationalization.
another example:
I graduated with a degree in Journalism, and because of that degree I was able to get an internship at a local newspaper in July that I am currently working for until the end of July.
*** "What is more" is a very awkward sentence that I have rarely used or heard of in any sense.
If it is used it is more in a conversational situation, so face-to-face dialogue.
Final thought:
Your sentences and word choice are good, just a few errors here and there. English is difficult, so keep up the hard work, and good luck with your studies.
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