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Migration - Can any one check the mistakes for me? Metropolises are becoming increasingly attractive to most of people, especially young persons (or youngsters). Although large city is deemed as (are seen as) a better place to live but it also has some drawbacks. Thus, the governments frequently seek measures to advance city life. Urban cities can bring many potential opportunities for migrants to change their lives but it is never easy to be successful or simply live an average life. The main urban problems is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village because of high-income level with high life standard possibilities. Another issue is that only qualified employees or applicants will survive in commpetitive job markets in big cities which means migrants could feel much stressful to find job. Moreover, as a results of migration, the amount of people living in cities increases significantly which causes many problem such as: shortage of fresh water, nourishment and utilities; public services are overcrowed; an increase of crime. However, there are various steps that government could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, government should place as much as important on developing provincial towns and rural areas so people will not move to find their jobs. For example, government ought to encourage businesses to invest in countryside by favorable policies. Secondly, all the residental buildings, hospitals schools should be built in suburbant areas that help reducing population overload and. To be more precise, rural people will access easily these essential services as well as urban people will have a chance to live in healthy environment. To conclude, the people who move to big cities have to face with high cost, competive jobs and lacking primary needs. To solve the problems, governments could do much more to enhance city life.

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Migration - Can any one check the mistakes for me?

Metropolises are becoming increasingly attractive to most people, especially young people (or youngsters). Although large cities are deemed as (are seen as) a better place to live, it also has some drawbacks. Thus, the governments frequently searches for ways to advance city life.

Urban cities can bring many potential opportunities for migrants to change their lives but it is never easy to be successful or simply live an average life. The main urban problem is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village because of a high-income level with the possibilities of living a high standard of living.  Another issue is that only qualified employees or applicants will survive in commpetitive job markets in big cities which means migrants could Be very stressed to find job. Moreover, as a results of migration, the amount of people living in cities increases significantly which causes many problem such as: shortage of fresh water, nourishment and utilities; public services are overcrowed; an increase of crime.

However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, government should place Equal importance on developing provincial towns and rural areas so people will not move to find their jobs. For example, government ought to encourage businesses to invest in agriculture  through favorable policies. Secondly, all the residental buildings, hospitals and schools should be built in suburban areas that help reduce population overload. Rural people will easily be able to access these essential services and urban people will have a chance to live in a healthy environment.

In conclusion, the people who move to big cities face high cost of living, competive jobs and lack basic necessities. To solve the problems, governments could do much more to enrich city life.

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