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Cellphones should be banned at school. Please help me to correct it It is argued that students should be banned to use cellphones in school nowadays. While I agree that there are still some downsides of cellphones, I do not totally think that we should stop using them at school. One the one hand, mobilphones can help us a lot. For some students, it would be a useful tool for them to learning. For example, if they want to improve their language that they are learning, they can turn on the audio and hear it all the time. If they want to read some article on the internet in their free time at school, they also need to use it. Besides, Students can use it in case of emergencies such as sudden accidents or fires because it provides a safety for youngsters as parents can easily get in touch with each other wherever they are. Moreover, when students take a long time to go their school by public transports or when they have break time, they can use it for entertainment, too. On the other hand, I would recommend that students should not use it all the time because it causes a lot of disruption and distress. One negative effect is that it can disturb others when they are concentrating to study or work in public places like libraries. Another pessimistic aspect is that students thesedays tend to busy sending messages whenever and wherever they are when they should be working. Futhermore, phones can be very instrusive because it sometimes creates some uninvited noise to others. Even more, many kids are addicted to texting on cellphones and their literacy and written skills are suffering badly. Overall, although cellphone cause a lot of problems, it has its own advantage. Cellphone should be banned where it interrupt other people or break rules such as in libraries or when students are having lectures, etc. But in other public places at school, it should be allowed as long as it is helpful. p/s : it is about 250 words (ielts writing)

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Cellphones should be banned at school. Please help me to correct it

It is argued that cellphones should be banned in school nowadays. While I agree that there are still some downsides to cellphones, I do not totally think that we should stop using them at school.

On the one hand, mobile phones can help us a lot. For some students, it would be a useful tool for them to learning. For example, if they want to improve the language that they are learning, they can turn on the audio and hear it all the time. If they want to read some article on the internet in their free time at school, they can also use it. Besides,
students can use it in cases of emergencies such as sudden accidents or fires because it provides a safety for youngsters as parents can easily get in touch with them wherever they are. Moreover, when students take a long time to get to their school by public transports or when they have break time, they can use it for entertainment, too.

On the other hand, I would recommend students to not use it all the time because it causes a lot of disruption and distress. One negative effect is that it can disturb others when they are concentrating on their studies or working in public places like libraries. Another pessimistic aspect is that students these days tend to send messages whenever and wherever they are, even when they should be working. Furthermore, phones can be very intrusive because it sometimes creates some uninvited noises to others. Even more, many kids are so addicted to texting through their cellphones that their literacy and written skills are suffering badly.

Overall, even though cellphones cause a lot of problems, they have their advantages. Cellphones should be banned where they interrupt other people or break rules such as in libraries or when students are having lectures, etc. But in other sectors of school, they should be allowed as long as they're helpful.
p/s : it is about 250 words (ielts writing)

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