A one-month army training
This morning I took some final exams and finished my first year at university. It is compulsory for all freshmen to take part in an army training in summer holiday. We are gathering at Mai Linh military centre and studying there for one month. We will not be allowed to come home until the course ends so we may feel homesick. Some students who had been to Mai Linh said that although there were a lot of disciplines as well as low quality diets, they had unforgettable memories about friendship. They all would love to stay there longer when the last day came. Tomorrow I am starting on journey. Time is quite rush while I have to prepare so many things for it. I expect to have nice experiences marked as the coolest memories in my school life.
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A one-month army training
This morning I took some final exams and finished my first year at university. It is compulsory for all freshmen to take part in an army training in the summer holiday. We are gathering at Mai Linh military center and studying there for one month. We will not be allowed to come home until the course ends so we may feel homesick. Some students who had been to Mai Linh said that although there were a lot of disciplines as well as low quality diets, they had unforgettable memories about friendship. They all would love to stay there longer when the last day came. Tomorrow I am starting on journey. Time is quite rush while I have to prepare so many things for it. I expect to have nice experiences marked as the coolest memories in my school life.1) 'The summer holiday' means the next coming summer holiday, 'a summer holiday' would mean on one of the summer holidays during high school, but it doesn't have to be the one after freshman year.
2) Center spelled as centre.
3) This is not wrong, but it is not something a native speaker would say. Try 'They had unforgettable memories about the friends they made there.'
4) This would normally be done with indirect speech, for example 'They all said they would love to stay here longer when the last day came.'
5) This needs either an article or a possessive marker For example; 'Tomorrow I am starting on my journey', or 'Tomorrow I am starting on a journey.' You could also say 'Tomorrow I am starting on the journey' or 'this journey'.
6) Should be 'I am quite rushed while I have to prepare so many things for it.' You could also say 'Time is quite short...', but it's not something a native speaker would say here. Also, 'it' is a pronoun, and usually refers to the last spoken noun, so it's okay if there are no nouns between the noun you're using it to replace, but if in doubt use the noun instead.
7) Not wrong, it just sounds unusual. 'I expect to remember this journey as one of the best memories of my school life.' Might be better.
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