Corrections · 1
need someone to correct my mistakes~Thanks!
Topic:some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The writing:
The new world economy encourages competition between groups. At the same time, groups use cooperation for success.
Obviously, competition is an inevitable approach to reach the destination. If a company wants to achieve its business goal, it has to compete with other opponents. If people desire to get a job opportunity, they must face fierce competition. On these occasions, people with the ability to compete will reach the target. So, cultivating a sense of competition will benefit the children in their later life.
However, cooperation is also an essential factor to the success of adults. While people in a group have to compete with other rivals, they have to deal with the relationship in the group appropriately as well. In this case, the sense of co-operation usually means negotiating , persuading or compromising. However, the ability to cooperate needs to be learned in childhood.
Personally, I think that the sense of competition and cooperation are important equally, just as a person needs two legs to get anywhere. The competitive ability gives us courage to fight with opponents, while the cooperative sense make us more sensible to cope with the problems in a group.
In conclusion, I agree that children should be able competitors, but to be fully useful adults, the sense of co-operation should be taken into consideration equally.
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
