The Piano
To the north east of the school history room, there is a grand piano on the two-stair platform which looks like two books overlapping. It shows students here read books and enjoy music. Knowledge and arts are both part of their life.
I'm describing the north hall of my school. I wish to get corrected by your kind help! If something is confusing, do leave me a message. Thank you!
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The Piano
To the north east of the school history room, there is a grand piano on the two-stair platform which looks like two books overlapping. > This sentence is wrong >The piano looks like the books ??
Near the upper left corner of the school history room , there is a grand piano on top of a platform that has a stairway of 2 steps, making it looks like 2 overlapping books, leading up to it.
*It is very confusing to use cardinal directions to describe a location of something in a small place.
Upper left-hand corner = upper left corner ( I am just using this as an example coz I do not know where north east is at any particular point in time.
* two-stair(ed) = This cannot be an adjective like "two-sided "
It shows students here read books and enjoy music. Knowledge and arts are both part of their life.
What is the dummy subject of "it" ? The piano ? The room ?
Here you find students reading books and practicing their music. Gaining knowledge and acquiring musical skills are both part of their school lives.
I'm describing the north hall of my school. I hope to get it corrected with your( kind) help. If there is any part that is confusing , (please) do leave (me) a message .Thank you!
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"Your kind" is not rude by my interpretation: Your help is kind or friendly.
If you had said "your kind's help," I would have seen that in a rude light.
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Thanks, Geek!!
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There's nothing to correct, good job! However, saying "your kind" is considered rude; perhaps use 'native speakers' instead?
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