Fourth Note - A memorable experience.
I first started writing about university and it turned out to be a really depressing note, so I decided to write about something else instead. The thing is I have an exam coming soon, so I’m basically locked up in my room studying and I’m not really doing anything worth writing about.
But a couple of weeks ago I took a break and did something I’ll remember for the rest of my life.
In Italy the first of May is a national holiday (Labour Day) and my parents and I went on a small trip in Tuscany. We met with some of dad’s old friends and we spent the weekend in a hotel.
I met two girls around my age who were really nice and we had a great time, but the best part came Saturday afternoon, because that’s when I jumped out of a plane from 4000 meters. I decided to do it only the night before, as soon as I found out that I could actually do it, and it was amazing.
It was a bit uncomfortable, I wasn’t dressed properly and I couldn’t fit into the suit they gave me, but once I was in the air I forgot all about it. I sky-dived and nobody can take it from me. I feel so proud of myself now. I actually did it, I didn’t chicken out of it. I was at 4000 meters from the ground, in the clouds, and I jumped. And when I finally landed, everybody cheered and called my name.
I’ve never won anything, I’m not good at sports, but in that moment I felt like a rock star. I felt like Michael Jordan, I felt like Freddie Mercury. I felt invincible.
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Fourth Note - A memorable experience.
At first I started writing about university but it turned out to be a really depressing note, so I decided to write about something else instead. The thing is, I have an exam coming soon, so I’m basically locked up in my room studying and I’m not really doing anything worth writing about.But a couple of weeks ago I took a break and did something I’ll remember for the rest of my life.
In Italy the first of May is a national holiday (Labour Day) and my parents and I went on a small trip to Tuscany. We met with some of dad’s old friends and we spent the weekend in a hotel.
I met two girls around my age who were really nice and we had a great time, but the best part came Saturday afternoon, because that’s when I jumped out of a plane from 4000 meters.
I had decided to do it only the night before, as soon as I found out that I could actually do it, and it was amazing.
It was a bit uncomfortable, as I wasn’t dressed properly and I couldn’t fit into the suit they gave me; but once I was in the air I forgot all about it. I sky-dived and nobody can take that from me. I feel so proud of myself now. I actually did it, I didn’t chicken out. I was at 4000 meters from the ground, in the clouds, and I jumped. And when I finally landed, everybody cheered and called my name.
I’ve never won anything and I’m not good at sports, but in that moment I felt like a rock star. I felt like Michael Jordan, I felt like Freddie Mercury. I felt invincible.
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Thank you Lilly! And please, correct any mistakes you can find, even really small ones. And the commas too. I find it really difficult to put those, since it't so different from the way we put them in my language.
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Your English is wonderful, you only have a few minor mistakes here and there. I see a few places where a comma should have been, but those are small details. If you want to know more about those, please message me.
Aside from that, when you said "I was at 4000 meters from the ground", you can delete the "at". It isn't needed. "I was 4000 meters from the ground" makes sense. Good luck with learning!
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