2016-5-14
A few days ago, I went to saw a perform of my school rock bank. It's amazing! Not only like the music, but also love them enjoy performing on stage. Especially like the bassist.
After that I got bassist's contact information. But!! I don't know what to talk with him. I never seen a live show before, and nor had attention any idols. I went to the show, simple because my friends were went. I listen to music in the past just for relax and fun, I nearly know some authentic rock music knowledge. I want talk with him, but I can not say any words. One of my friend encouraged me to talk something with him, and other one thought that I would like more people when I going to some music festivals.
Finally, I still had barely words with him .
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2016-5-14
A few days ago, I went to see a performance of my school rock band. It's amazing! Not only did I like the music, but also loved seeing them enjoy performing on stage--especially the bassist.After the concert, I got the bassist's contact information. But I don't know what to say to him. I had never seen a live show before or had the attention of any idols. I went to the show simply because my friends went. I listened to music in the past just to relax and have fun, and I knew some authentic rock music knowledge*. I want talk with him, but I cannot say anything. One of my friends encouraged me to say something to him and other one thought that I would like more people when I went to other music festivals.
Finally**, I don't know what to say to him.
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Notes:
*Although this sentence is grammatically correct, it's a little repetitive with "know/knew" and "knowledge." I'd recommend using "and I knew a little bit about authentic rock music" if you want to sound more natural.
**"Finally" is definitely not correct here, but the correct term depends on your intention. If you mean that, now, in the present you still don't know what to say to him, then I would recommend "Still, I don't know what to say to him." If you want to summarize what you have written and wrap it up, I would use "Overall, I still don't know what to say to him."
-Overall, this was pretty good! Keep working at it :)
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