It's your time
Once you wake up, you can hear the clock ticking. It's singing the latest song for you and counting down to your last day.
Do you still remember your last birthday party? Do you remember how happy were you feeling? And, of course, you will never forget the cake. But, you have to realize that the cake you cut it every year doesn't have any sense of happiness. Just, recognize that it makes you closer to your death day.
Waiting for corrections. Thanks in advance.
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 3
1
It's your time
Once you wake up, you can hear the clock ticking. It's singing the latest song for you and counting down to your last day.Do you still remember your last birthday party? Do you remember how happy were you feeling? And, of course, you will never forget the cake. But, you have to realize that the cake you cut it every year doesn't have any sense of happiness. Just, recognize that it makes you closer to your death day.
Waiting for corrections. Thanks in advance.
line 4; how happy you were feeling
line 5; the cake you cut every year
line 6: if you have invented a new phrase 'death day' in contrast to birthday, well done . How about deathday? A good new poetical addition to the language. 'the day of your death' is the more common phrase.
0
I agree with you brother.. Each second we miss or go through cannot be regained.. Past is past! No matter you enjoyed them or not. It is all about how did we utilize them whether for the life here or hereafter.
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
