A Good Night
In the evening,one of my school's organizations holds a contest.This contest is called"Run In The Night".
They asked us to run along the river.I am so excited at first and I am the leader,but after thirty minutes later,I just too hard to breath.So I stop to walk slowly and see other athleters run.
After taking a shower,I sit at my bed,and I feel happy and satisfied.
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A Good Night
In the evening,one of my school's organizations holds held a contest. This The contest is was called "Run In The Night".They asked us to run along the river.I am was so excited I was the leader at first but (since I ran out of breath) in thirty minutes, I slowly stopped and saw the other athletes run. at first and I am the leader,but after thirty minutes later,I just too hard to breath. (当你在笔记本电脑上打字，不要忘记你的空间) So I stop to walk slowly and see other athleters run.
After taking I toke a shower,I sit at sat on my bed,and I feeling happy and satisfied.
由于这已经发生了，你应该使用一般过去时。
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There are few grammatical mistakes in your writing. However, I wasn't sure which tense you were writing in -you start in past tense then change to present tense. I have also changed a few bits to make it read better.
A Good Night
One evening In the evening,one of my school's organizations holds a contest.This contest is called"Run In The Night".They asked ask us to run along the river.I am so excited at first and I am the leader At first, I am so excited and leading out in front but thirty minutes later, I just find it too hard to breathe.,but after thirty minutes later,I just too hard to breath.So I stop slow down (you can't stop and slow down!) to walk more slowly and watch the see other athleters athletes running.
After taking a shower,I sit at my bed,and I feel happy and satisfied.
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