A day I get up at 9:30am,then i open my computer to watch the soap opera named"ode to joy".At about 12:00,i go to have the lunch.Twenty minutes later,i come back to the domitary,and continue to watch

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A day I get up at 9:30am,then i open my computer to watch the soap opera named"ode to joy".At about 12:00,i go to have the lunch.Twenty minutes later,i come back to the domitary,and continue to watch until 4:00pm. It's rainy, i feel upset.After i watch the whole soap opera,i feel worse.I do'nt why,but just the feeling comes. I wonder if it's human beings' nature--you are unsatisfactory what you can't control,but you are still unsatisfactory to what you possess.

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A Day

I get up at 9:30am, then I open up OR turn on my computer to watch the soap opera named "Ode To Joy" OR to watch a soap opera called "Ode To Joy". At about 12:00, I go to have the lunch.Twenty minutes later I come back to the dormitory, and continue to watch the show OR "Ode To Joy" until 4:00pm.

It's rainy, I feel upset. OR It's rainy and I feel upset. After I watch the whole soap opera, I feel worse. OR Then after I watch the whole soap opera I feel worse. I don't why, but just the feeling just comes.

I wonder if it's human beings' nature (Either "I wonder if it's a human being's nature" or "I wonder if it's the nature of human beings" might sound a bit better): you are unsatisfied with what you can't control, but you are still unsatisfied with(?) what you possess. OR but you are still unsatisfied with the control you possess. (? Sorry, I'm not sure what you're trying to say here!)

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Well done, this was well written (I understood almost everything! The last sentence was the only confusing bit!) and it even went on a deep tangent at the end there! I know what you mean about watching an entire show, I get the same feeling :D

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