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Just practising... have celebrities right to complain when the media are intruding on their privacy? Celebrities, better most of them, have a talent and they’ve decided to entertain all the people around the world with it, though I think they deserve to live their private life without being stressed by the magazine reporters. They are well-known worldwide and they make lots of money entertaining us. In our free time we watch their movies, we listen to their songs, we follow their television programmes, we always keep up with the latest episodes of the series they act in. Sometimes we even become addicted to them: we can’t overcome a bad moment in our life without listening to our favourite smoothing song or we can’t go to sleep before having watched the latest episode of the television serie we are following. We fall in love with the characters they pretend to be and before we realize it, we find ourselves in love with them as well. As a result we want to know more about them: how they live when they are not acting or being recorded, how their relationship with their partner is going and even what their favourite haircut and outfits are. Clearly we are obsessed. On one hand they should have known, and I’m sure they do, that becoming famous means living in a spotlight. They are comfortable and confident before a recording camera indeed. On the other hand being famous should be just their “job” and we should let them live their private life the way they want. In short I agree with celebrities when they complain about a magazine reporter hiding behind a bush and spying them while they are spending time with their family on a beach. Moreover I think we should stop investigating in other people’s life and we should keep up with social issues instead.

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Just practising... have celebrities right to complain when the media are intruding on their privacy?

Celebrities, better most [the majority] of them, have a talent and they’ve decided to entertain all the people around the world with it , though . However,I think they deserve to live their private life [lives] without being stressed by the magazine reporters.
They are well-known worldwide and they make lots of money entertaining us. In our free time we watch their movies, we listen to their songs, we follow their television programmes [programs], we always keep up with the latest episodes of the series they act in. Sometimes we even become addicted to them: we can’t overcome a bad moment in our life without listening to our favourite smoothing [soothing] song or we can’t go to sleep before having watched the latest episode of the television serie [series] we are following. We fall in love with the characters they pretend to be and before we realize it, we find ourselves in love with them as well. As a result we want to know more about them: how they live when they are not acting or being recorded, how their relationship with their partner is going and even what their favourite haircut and outfits are. Clearly we are obsessed.
On one hand they should have known, and I’m sure they do, that becoming famous means living in a spotlight. They are comfortable and confident before a recording camera indeed. On the other hand being famous should be just their “job” and we should let them live their private life the way they want.
In short I agree with celebrities when they complain about a magazine reporter hiding behind a bush and spying [on] them while they are spending time with their family on a beach. Moreover I think we should stop investigating in other people’s life [lives] and we should keep up with social issues instead.
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Overall, very well written! One mistake you are making, however, is using a comma to separate multiple sentences. You should either substitute a semicolon for the comma, or end each sentence with a period, then capitalize the first letter of the next sentence. For instance, "... we listen to their songs, we follow their television programmes, ..." should be "we listen to their songs; we follow their television programs; ..." or "We listen to their songs. We follow their television programs. ..."

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