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Type: Narration Topic: The circumstances that led to the breakup of a friendship If a thing annoys ourselves, we will naturally to find friends to talk about it. Friend is important to us because we can share our happiness and sorrow to her or him. Instead, without friend, you can’t relieve your emotions and your life will be boring. So, making a friend is an important thing in your life. However, keeping a great relationship of friends is not an easy thing. There is an example sharing to you, I have many friends before I met Mary. The first time I saw that Mary is lonely and have no any friends so I decided to be her friend. One day she became sort of jealous than other friends to me, but other friends thought that Marry ruins our friendship. I ignored it because of I believed Marry. After a few days, teacher said that my friends saw that someone throw my personal belongings out the garbage can who is Mary. Suddenly, I feel that Mary was not my friend anymore. Although it was so sorrowful to me, I’m really thankful my friends helping me in trouble. Therefore, it not only made me get the truly friends but made me start afresh recognizing what is about the friendship. I'm tried to write a formal writing if I make mistake in grammar, hope you can help me to fix it. if I do wrong the style of writing, please, let me know Anyway, thanks for your helping :)

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Type: Narration Topic: The circumstances that led to the breakup of a friendship

If a thing annoys us, we will naturally look to friends to talk about it. A friend is important to us because we can share our happiness and sorrow with her or him. Instead, without a friend, you can’t relieve your emotions and your life will be boring. So, making a friend is an important thing in your life. However, keeping a great relationship between friends is not an easy thing.
Here is an example I can share with you. I had many friends before I met Mary. The first time I saw that Mary was lonely and had no any friends, I decided to be her friend. One day she became sort of jealous of my other friends, but they thought that Marry ruined our friendship. I ignored it because of I believed Mary. After a few days, the teacher said that my friends saw that someone threw my personal belongings out into the garbage can and it was Mary. Suddenly, I felt that Mary was not my friend anymore.
Although it was so sorrowful for me, I’m really thankful to my friends for helping me in trouble. Therefore, it not only made me get true friends but made me start afresh recognizing what is true about friendship.

I'm tried to write formally. If I make mistake in grammar, I hope you can help me to fix it.
If I do wrong in the style of writing, please let me know.
Anyway, thanks for your help :)

Very well written! Everything was clear to understand.

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抱歉喔,我們是太陽的
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我一直以为台湾也是五星红旗呢

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