Something I wanted to buy
When I was 11 years old I wanted to have a pair of rollerskates, but my parents couldn’t afford them. By the time I turned 16, I had saved dome money. It was an enough amount to purchase them. I went to the store and chose the most beautiful ones. They were 40%off. I thought: “a day like this won’t come along again” My parents didn’t want me to buy them, because I could be injured, but in the end they agreed because I had gotten good grades at school. They helped me with some money.
is it correct? can I do it better? thanks!
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Something I wanted to buy
When I was 11 years old I wanted to have a pair of rollerskates, but my parents couldn’t afford them. By the time I turned 16, I had saved some money. It was an enough amount to purchase them. I went to the store and chose the most beautiful ones. They were 40% off. I thought: “A day like this won’t come along again.” My parents didn’t want me to buy them, because I could get hurt, but in the end they agreed because I had gotten good grades at school. They helped me out with some money.is it correct? can I do it better? thanks!
It's perfectly understandable English, but I added some more idiomatic phrases!
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