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Swimming 13/Apr/2016 writing / swimming To be fair, I was never much of a sport guy. While I was a student, I tended to read books rather than play something active outside. Although I was thinking I'd like to tame myself to play sports, it seemed too late for me. To add, it was another problem for me not to have a something of sport sense. By the way, I've been in Philippines to study English for 2 months, I just came up with that this country is the best one to start learning how to swim. So, I had some swimming lesson at every weekend, and it took 1 month. Which was great, though it was somewhat fast-teaching. Anyway, I've become to be able to swim with several basic poses such as free style and frog kick, and so on. In fact, I could barely breathe during swimming, though. But I was really happy to make a sport be one of my hobby. Since I started making a living in Australia, I visit at a pool, sometimes. Honestly, I'd be exhausted right after finishing just two routines and happen to think what the hell am I doing, seeing some old guys who seemed never to stop their races in the pool. Nevertheless, I'm working on it. I think swimming is likely to show my personal matter in itself. To my insight into myself, I've always hang on one thing too hard. While I was under learning swimming, it was the most frequency word I've heard from my tutor, "Relax". Yes, I think I'd rather be relax in every aside in myself. Because, straining too strong would make it broken rather than bent. During my university, I was thinking too serious and rigid when it comes to my major, Architecture. And someday, I've figured out it make me and my works worse, and need to consider things more flexible and easy. As it turns out, there is something I couldn't cope with on nothing but excessive trying.

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Swimming

13/Apr/2016
writing / swimming

To be fair, I was never much of a sportsman guy. While I was a student, I tended to read books rather than do play something active outside. Although I thought about forcing was thinking I'd like to tame myself to play sports, it seemed too late for me. To add, In addition, it was another problem for me was not to having any a something of sports sense. By the way, I've been in the Philippines to study English for 2 months, I just realised came up with that this country was the best one to start learning how to swim. So, I had some swimming lessons at every weekend, and it took 1 month. Which was great, though it was somewhat fast-teaching. Anyway, I've become to be  am able to swim in with several basic poses styles such as free style and breast stroke frog kick, and so on. In fact, I could barely breathe during whilst swimming, though. But I was really happy to make this activity a sport be one of my hobbies. Since I started making a living in Australia, I occassionally  visit at a pool, sometimes. Honestly, I'd be I am exhausted right after finishing just two routines and happen to think what the hell am I doing? seeing I watch some old guys who seemed never to stop their races/laps in the pool. Nevertheless, I'm working on it.
I think swimming is likely to show my personal matter in itself.?? What I am able to do To my mind I've always been too intense insight into myself, I've always hang on one thing too hard. While I was under learning swimming, it was the most frequent word I've heard from my tutor was, "Relax". Yes, I think I'd rather be relaxed in everything I do/every aspect of my life aside in myself. Because, too much stress will break me. straining too strong would make it broken rather than bent. During my university days, I was thinking too serious and rigid when it came comes to my major, Architecture. And one day, I've figured out it made me and my works worse, and I needed to consider things be more flexible and easy. As it turns out, there is nothing something I cant couldn't cope with after on nothing but excessive trying.

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Swimming

13/Apr/2016
writing / swimming

To be fair, I was never (much of a sport guy) Maybe "To be fair, I was never too into sports". While I was a student, I tended to read books rather than play something active outside .(rather than engage in outdoor activites?) Although I was thinking I'd like to tame (really awkward choice here, typically not used for humans, I'd prefer "force") myself to play sports, it seemed too late for me. To add, it was another problem for me not to have a something of sport sense(experience with sports?). By the way, I've been in Philippines to study English for 2 months, I just came up with(decided?) that this country is the best one to start learning how to swim. So, I had some swimming lesson at every weekend, and it took 1 month. Which was great, though it was somewhat fast-teaching.(I had swimming lessons every weekend for a month, which was great, though it was a bit too fast-paced). Anyway, I've become to be able to swim with several basic poses such as free style and frog kick, and so on. In fact, initially I could barely breathe during swimming, though. But I was really happy to make a sport be one of my hobby (to have a sport as one of my hobbies). Since I started making a living in Australia, I visit at a pool, sometimes. Honestly, I'd be exhausted right after finishing just two routines and happen to think what the hell am I doing, seeing some old guys who seemed never to stop their races in the pool. Nevertheless, I'm working on it.
I think swimming is likely to show my personal matter in itselfpersonality. To myFor some insight into myself, I've always hang on hung on to one thing too hard. While I was under learning swimming, it was the most frequency word I've heard from my tutor, the most frequent word I heard for my tutor was "Relax". Yes, I think I'd rather be relaxing in every aside in myself. Because, straining too strong would make it broken rather than bent(Not sure what you're trying to say here? Make what broken?) During my university, I was thinking too serious and rigid when it comes(came)to my major, Architecture. And someday, I've figured out it makes me and my works worse, and need to consider things more flexible and easy  I need to be more flexible. As it turns out, there is something I couldn't cope with, on nothing but excessive trying As it turns out, the one thing I couldn't cope with was not over exerting myself.

* Just did a quick pass, may have missed something. Overall, most of the mistakes were just instances of really awkward phrasing.

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