The Hotel in Marraksh

I continue from before, now that I have the time ))

Yesterday, after I had finished work , I got a call from a friend who wanted me to meet him urgently, and I could tell that there was something bad had happened from the sound of his voice.

I've never heard him speaks like that,and I couldn't tell if he was angry or scared -- or maybe both.

He refused to tell me anything until I get there, so I drove as quickly as possible to down town through the streets of Marrakesh to reach my destination , which was in downtown Marrakash..

While I was driving my head was about to explode with all types of the worse scenarios that could happened to my friend or to his family.X

> While I was driving there , my mind was driven to frenzy by all the worst thought I could think of as to what could have happened to him or , maybe , his family.

It's really scaring where your mind can take you to, when you think of such things especially about the people you love, he told me to meet at The Abdo Hotel, it was strange though, he's always told me he doesn't like hotels. XX

>It was really scary when my mind started playing out all the worst possible scenarios that could have happened , but I guessed it was only natural for me to feel that way,especially when a dear friend seemed to be in big trouble.

>My deep concern for him was not help by the fact that he told me to meet him at the Abdo Hotel , and I found this strange because he had always tell me that he did not like to be in a hotel .

 So I got there, went to the hotel room and while I was about to knock on the door I heard some strange voices it's like a crowd living there, I knocked, he opened the door and told me with a sorry face, Happy Birthday.X

> When I reached the hotel , I rushed to his room and was about to knock on the door when I heard some unfamiliar voices inside , as if there was a crowd of people inside.

>After I knocked on the door, my friend soon opened it  ; and he , with a sheepish look on his face, wished me "Happy Birthday".

Sheepish > showing or feeling embarrassment especially because you have done something foolish or wrong .

The Hotel in Marraksh

Yesterday after I had finished work , I got a call from a friend who want me to meet him urgently, I could tell that there was something bad happened from the sound of his voice, I've never heard him speaks like that, I couldn't tell if he was angry or scared or maybe both, he refused to tell me anything until I get there, so I drove as quickly as possible to down town through the streets of Marrakesh, and while I was driving my head was about to explode with all types of the worse scenarios that could happened to my friend or to his family, It's really scaring where your mind can take you to, when you think of such things especially about the people you love, he told me to meet at The Abdo Hotel, it was strange though, he's always told me he doesn't like hotels, so I got there, went to the hotel room and while I was about to knock on the door I heard some strange voices it's like a crowd living there, I knocked, he opened the door and told me with a sorry face, Happy Birthday.

This is bad writing bro . Do you know that the whole sentence is the essay !! Never over- comma !

Find areas to show a "break" , areas where I,for example , have shown in different colours to show that these sentense can stans  on their own ( independent clauses )

When you "cut" the seperate independent clauses with a comma , you have made a comma slice mistake .

You can join them if it not too long with a conjunction ,e.g., "and" and "but" with a comma before them as shown below .

Example > The first sentence before "full stop " is this :

1 > Yesterday after I had finished work , I got a call from a friend who want me to meet him urgently, AND I could tell that  something bad had happened from the sound of his voice .

2 > I've never heard him speak like that before  , AND I couldn't tell if he was angry or scared --maybe he was  both angry and scared -- BUT he refused to tell me anything until I get there.

3>

4>

ETC

If you dont put a full stop , that means the reader cannot pause long . A comma allows only a short pause .