I appreciate anyone who correct this letter for me. Thank you in advance.

Dear friends
I need this letter to be very formal and polite. I'm so thankful if you correct it for me. I also appreciate you if tell me your opinion about that.

Dear Dr.Professor ,
My manuscript  is attached to this email. The most important newly-added parts are highlighted --the yellow ones are based on referee's suggestions and the blue ones are according to my opinion

Please find attached my manuscript .The most important newly-added parts are highlighted : those that are highlighted in yellow are based on a referee's suggestion ,and my opinion is in green

 I also appreciate if you don't share the ideas of this manuscript.> Rude .Suggesting he might do it !

Never use "negative " in formal letter >"you don't"

> I will be most grateful if you can help me ensure that my manuscript remains confidential.

In fact ,my next goal is to seek, find and join to a research group ,and I want this manuscript to be published ( in the future)
Kind Regards