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My name is Idarmis Torres Figueroa. I was born and raised in Puerto Rico. I’m a junior at the University of Puerto Rico, Río Piedras Campus, where I’m majoring in Cellular Molecular Biology. I want to explore the Public Health field while working with an interdisciplinary and multicultural perspective. My interests revolve around health disparities within the Latino community and the study of patterns of diseases such as Diabetes. I really enjoy music; I play guitar and mandolin and I love to play Ping Pong.
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Please HELP with this one! I made some changes...
My name is Idarmis Torres Figueroa. I was born and raised in Puerto Rico. I’m a junior at the University of Puerto Rico, Río Piedras Campus, where I’m majoring in Cellular Molecular Biology. I want to explore the Public Health field while working from an interdisciplinary and multicultural perspective. My interests revolve around health disparities within the Latino community and the patterns of diseases such as Diabetes. I really enjoy music, play guitar and mandolin and love to play ping pong.(check out kaggle.com for a project on predicting diabetic retinopathy)
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Good job! The only thing I would recommend changing is adding two commas in this sentence: My interests revolve around health disparities within the Latino community, and the study of patterns of diseases, such as Diabetes.
Also add a comma in:I really enjoy music; I play guitar and mandolin, and I love to play Ping Pong.
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There's nothing wrong with it :)
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I don't see anything that needs to be corrected on this entry except the fact that I had to wipe my nose because it bled when I read your major.
Keep this up!
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