Are parents today more involved in their children's education?
(This is a writing practice. Please help me with grammars and/or other errors. Thanks!!)
In my opinion, children’s education becomes a more and more important concern among parents. Here are some reasons why:
First of all, the birth rate nowadays is much less than it was in the past. As a result, parents today can pay more attention to each child. For example, my grandparents have 8 children. They were so exhausted that sometimes they could not take good care of each child’s basic need, not even saying consider education matters. In contract, my parents only have 2 kids – me and my brother. So we both got a lot of time and caring from parents throughout our growing up. My parents definitely spent more time on children’s education than their parents did.
Furthermore, the gradually improved global economic makes living today easier than past. I believe that people are more willing to care about other aspects of life, such as education, art and traveling, when they experience less living pressure.
Last but not least, I think government today makes more effort to improve children’s education. The society today also emphasizes the importance of children’s education. Under these influences, parents today naturally involve more in their children’s education.
That’s why I agree with the statement that parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
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Are parents today more involved in their children's education?
(This is a writing practice. Please help me with grammars and/or other errors. Thanks!!)In my opinion, children’s education have became a more and more important concern among parents. Here are some reasons why:
First of all, the birth rate nowadays is much less than it was in the past. As a result, parents today can pay more attention to each child. For example, my grandparents have 8 children. They were so exhausted therefore, sometimes they could not take good care of each child’s basic need, they even didn't have chance to consider education matters. in the contrast , my parents only have 2 kids – me and my brother. So we both got a lot of time and caring from parents throughout our growing up period. My parents definitely spent more time on children’s education than their parents did.
Furthermore, the global economic has improved gradually which makes living easier than past. I believe that people are more willing to care about other aspects of life, such as education, art and traveling, when they feel less life pressure.
Last but not least, I think government today makes more effort to improve children’s education. The society today also emphasizes on the importance of children’s education. as result today, parents naturally are more involved in their children’s education.
That’s why I agree with thesis statement which i mentioned earlier . (no need for this sentence )
PS. good entry, I liked it =) good luck
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