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Don’t let yourself become a mouse, whereas you will be eaten by a cat. In 1858, the was a girl born in a Swedish rich family. But a few day later, the little girl got a unknown disease and paralyzed, she lost the ability for walking. On day, the girl and her family went excursion on a ship. The captain told the little girl, the is a bird in the heaven. She was fascinated by the bird and passionately wanted to see the bird by herself. Than the nurse kept the little girl on the board and went for the captain, but the little kid couldn't resist the temptation of the bird for such a long time, then she asked the waiter on the board to take her to see the bird. But those waiters didn’t know the girl couldn’t walk, just taking her to pursue the beautiful bird. The miracle happened,because of the extraordinary longing, she just held the waiter’s hand and stood up slowly. Since then, the girl got over the sickness. When she grown up, she selflessly devoted herself into literature, she became the first woman who won Nobel prize in the world. Dedicating yourself selflessly is a short-cut way to reach success, it is only in this position,the humans can get rid of the cocoon of themselves and explode the utmost power of themselves

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Don’t let yourself become a mouse, whereas you will be eaten by a cat

In 1858, there was a girl born in a rich Swedish family. A few day after her birth, the little girl got a unknown disease and was paralyzed, losing the ability to walk.

One day, the girl and her family went on a ship trip. The captain told the little girl about a bird living in heaven. She was fascinated by the bird and passionately wanted to see it by herself. The nurse kept the little girl on the boat and went to the captain, but the little kid couldn't resist the temptation for such a long time and asked the waiter to take her to see the bird. The waiter didn't know the girl couldn’t walk and just took her to the beautiful bird.

Thanks to the extraordinary longing she felt, a miracle happened: as she held the waiter’s hand, she stood up slowly. Since then, the girl got over the sickness. While growing up,  she selflessly devoted herself to literature and became the first woman in the world to win the Nobel prize.

Dedicating yourself selflessly is a shortcut to succes. It is only in this position that humans can get rid of the cocoon they buit around themselves and unleash the utmost power that lives within themselves.

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By the way, 要不然 = otherwise. I think that's what you meant when you wrote: whereas you will be eaten by a cat.
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Hi Joseph, thanks for helping me.

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