My first job
This is the first time I've ever write a note on the Internet. I want to do it to point a special milestone in my life which could help me to change my life.
Last summer, my best friend and I have been selling ambarella which is a favourite fruit of women, and pregnant women in particular. Although, we only sell on the Internet and ambarella is quite cheap, it could bring us about 10 million VND per month. You may think it's not a big money, but it means a lot to us. It was the first money I 've ever got by myself. However, our parents thought we have to focus on our studies, and we must not continue it. At that moment, we really felt bored, but we didn't have anyway to convince parents. After a week, we studied and did house work hard, we tried to convince our parents to change their view, but we did not succeed . Therefore, we decided to hide our parents and keep selling ambarella. We went to university in the morning, sold ambarella in the afternoon and we did homework and remaining things in the evening. Honestly, we worked very hard, but we think the life is wonderfull. Everything is going well untill Tet holiday. We have to come back home as soon as we finished the term. We ordered a lot of ambarella to sell for Tet, so we had to stay in HN untill we sell all of it and it meaned we couldnot come back home soon. We talked to parents about it, and surprising they did not angry with us. They said that we could do anything we want provided that we study hard and get good marks.
Now, we feel happy because we can do what we like. We will try our best to develop the online shop and complete our studies. We are preparing for our first trip to Thailand this summer which is paid by ourselves. I think it's the most significant trip of our youth lifetime
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This is the first time I've written a note on the internet. I want to write about my story because I'd like to express a special milestone in my life which could help (change my life) <-- not sure about this meaning (doesn't make sense).
Last summer, my bestfriend and I have been selling (umbrellas) <-- (Not sure about the word you're trying to use)
which is a favorite fruit for women and pregnant woman in particular. You may think it's not big money <-- try not to use 'you'. You can replace this sentence with "It may not seem to be that much money", but the money means a lot to us since its the first time I've ever received money for myself. (Don't really need to use however but you can) Our parents believed that our studies were a first priority and told us not to continue it. At that moment we felt really 'bored' <-- I don't think this is the term you're trying to use. (You can replace this word with angry, sad or disappointing)
Last summer, my bestfriend and I have been selling (umbrellas) <-- (Not sure about the word you're trying to use)
which is a favorite fruit for women and pregnant woman in particular. You may think it's not big money <-- try not to use 'you'. You can replace this sentence with "It may not seem to be that much money", but the money means a lot to us since its the first time I've ever received money for myself. (Don't really need to use however but you can) Our parents believed that our studies were a first priority and told us not to continue it. At that moment we felt really 'bored' <-- I don't think this is the term you're trying to use. (You can replace this word with angry, sad or disappointing)
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