Memory of my childhood
It was a sunny and nice day.
My neighbor's children,also my childhood partners, with me, we climed up the moutain which near our house.
We totally ran into the hug of nature, took a breath of fresh air and deeply attracted by the faint aroma of flowers.
We stood on the top of the moutain, and speaked loudly saying nihao to the sunset, when we stopped talking, it still echoing around the distant moutains.It seems like the sunset and moutains were saying nihao to us in return. We laughed loudly, roared loudly.
Our shadows were streched by the downing sunset longer and longer.
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Memory of my childhood
It was a sunny and nice day.My neighbor's children, also my childhood partners companions, with me , we climbed up the mountain which was near our house.
We totally ran into the hug of nature, took a breath of fresh air and were deeply attracted by the faint aroma of flowers.
We stood on the top of the mountain, and speaked spoke loudly, saying "ni hao" to the sunset. When we stopped talking, it still echoed around the distant mountains. It seemed like the sunset and mountains were saying "ni hao" to us in return. We laughed loudly, roared loudly.
Our shadows were stretched by the downing sunset longer and longer by the setting sun.
I like this writing. It's very poetic, so I didn't want to change some of your interesting and original sentences.
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Memory of my childhood
It was a sunny and nice day.(Correct but usually you would say: "It was sunny and nice today.")
My neighbor's children,also my childhood partners, with me, we climed up the moutain which near our house.
("My neighbor's children, my childhood partners and I climbed the mountain near our house.")
We totally ran into the hug of nature, took a breath of fresh air and deeply attracted by the faint aroma of flowers.
("We totally ran into the hug of nature, took a breath of fresh air and WERE deeply attracted by the faint aroma of flowers.)
We stood on the top of the moutain, and speaked loudly saying nihao to the sunset, when we stopped talking, it still echoing around the distant moutains.It seems like the sunset and moutains were saying nihao to us in return. We laughed loudly, roared loudly.
Our shadows were streched by the downing sunset longer and longer.
(We stood on the top of the moutain, and SPOKE loudly saying nihao to the sunset, when we stopped talking, it still echoing around the distant moutains.It seems like the sunset and moutains were saying nihao to us in return. We laughed loudly, roared loudly, our shadows stretched by the lowering sunset longer and longer.)
Poetry!
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